Starlight

~ a romantic poem written in an Octelle form ~

art ~ Vincent van Gogh

 

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As softly as a lover’s sigh

the stars sang in the moonlit sky

sweet melodies in the night

that woke the clocks with delight

as our hearts in soft embrace

breathed words of silk and of lace

as softly as a lover’s sigh

the stars sang in the moonlit sky

 

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With honey lips, as sweet as wine

my hand in his, his hand in mine

we traced a dream on this night

as passion played soft starlight

and in his arms I will stay

always to love him this way

with honey lips, as sweet as wine

my hand in his, his hand in mine…

 

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Author's Note

The Octelle is a form created by Emily Romano. It has eight lines and the rhyme scheme is aabbccaa, the syllable count is 88777788. The first two lines are repeated as the last two lines. What further sets the form, in its description, is using personification and symbolism in a telling manner. You may have as many verses as you wish as long as they follow the same rules.

Reviews

[Trace]

It seems for a short time every year I know who is on your mind
as your poetry is a clear window to your heart and soul.
I know how much he meant to you and my heart goes out to you my dear friend.
This is a wonderful expression of your talent and it holds so much meaning.
I am so sorry for your loss.

My love always.
Trace

[MsJewel]

You know me so well....and I'm thankful for a friend like you. Thank you for supporting my poetry. Hugs, Julie

[kublakhan27]

Absolutely gorgeous...fixed forms can be confining at times but I wouldn't even know I was reading a fixed form here...it's just perfect...I'm speechless my friend :)

[MsJewel]

I'm humbled by your wonderful comment and compliment. Thank you :) Julie

[Robbie~xoxo~]

First of all this is one of my ultimate favorite Paintings... I adore VAN GOGH's art!

I am thrilled to read your romantic and whimsical words which accompany this
magnificent art...Sweetly incorporated, Julie!!

Into my favorites!~xoxo~:)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. Hugs, Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

A gorgeous write of love and romance, Julie. You surely are in Valentine's Day mode this week! I applaud you for trying out the Octelle. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Every day should be Valentines Day..don't you think? Thank you for your wonderful comment. I'm not really comfortable with this form, but working on it! :) julie

[Lydia Shutter]

Well, comfortable or not, you aced it! And, yes, Julie, every day SHOULD be Valentine's Day...absolutely!

[R. L. Hill]

This is brilliantly penned, dearest! Thank you for the information as well! It makes me want to test one out myself. This is another little scribble of yours that I adore :D

[MsJewel]

You should try it - forms can be fun - and challenging. I appreciate your friendship. :) Julie

[R. L. Hill]

Likewise, hun. And I definitely give it a try.

[Blue]

I admire poets who follow a specific form (which I think is harder than a free verse) while retaining the quality of the message. Is this the first time you wrote a poem in Octelle form? Because if it is, I'll be more impressed! Very lovely, Julie.

[MsJewel]

Actually, I think freeverse is harder - I have trouble with the flow. This isn't my first Octelle, but it's not a form I'm comfortable with - so thank you so much for the wonderful comment :) Julie

[wordman]

my hand in his,his hand in mine memories that will linger for evermore
a lovely write and a million dollar portrait a great combination

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Giggling Star]

This is a lovely form, and the story you've woven is magical. You are a true magician of the poetry world!

[MsJewel]

You're the best! Thank you. Hugs, Julie

[Frieda P]

Exactly how your poetry always reads to me, soft as a lover's sigh Julie, & my favorite Van Gogh, both so utterly entrancing and lovely. :-)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Frieda :) Julie

[Brittany Zedalis]

I love this poem and I love that painting. :D

[MsJewel]

Thank you! :) Julie