Butterfly

~ written in Octelle form ~

art ~ Andrew Atroshenko

 

 

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Poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

floating through a sky of blue

to dance ‘pon a cloud or two

sunbeams weave a light within

so shadows can’t find her when

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly

~~~

Author's Note

The Octelle is a form created by Emily Romano. It has eight lines and the rhyme scheme is aabbccaa, the syllable count is 88777788. The first two lines are repeated as the last two lines. What further sets the form, in its description, is using personification and symbolism in a telling manner.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

poised for flight, with wings held high

she dreams she is a butterfly
sweet write. You are extremely good in these colourful depictions :)
Love :)
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[MsJewel]

Thank you Anand! :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

pleasure is mine. I'm a fan :)

[Claire Lorraine]

I LOVE this poem! Another one from you added to my favorites!
I do not have words to express how this one makes me feel.
I feel that it describes me, so I suppose in that way you can understand what I mean.
The imagery of butterflies is very real and dear to me and they way you so beautifully wove this poem is perfect.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comments on my poetry. I appreciate it very much. I look forward to reading your poetry. Have a wonderful evening :) Julie

[Laura Harrison]

What a captivating, magical piece! I really loved it

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you :) Julie

[star73]

Very nice I don't know a lot about poetry some things and quotes:) It's very beautiful

[MsJewel]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this one. This form is actually very easy to follow. You should try it sometime - forms can be fun. :) Julie

[Aethereal]

I just love poems with butterflies in them. Ballerinas and butterflies together is an intoxicating combination. Your poem inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you to keep as your own.

Ballerina’s Dream

Ballerina lift your wings
mimicking a butterfly
as your body skyward flings
far into the boundless sky.

Let go of your earthly strings
pirouetting clouds on high.
Feel the warmth that sunlight brings
gliding through a rainbows eye.

[MsJewel]

Thank you. Your poem is lovely! :) Julie

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! I just wanted to give you some idea about how your poem affected me. You may do anything that you want with this poem. I like action verbs such as mimicking, fling, let go, pirouette, feel, glide. A poem should do something.

[Valeigh Starr]

This makes me smile! It reminds me of when butterflies were my favorite thing ever when I was about 10. I wanted to be a butterfly because I could fly away in the sky, and problems couldn't happen if I was flying. Thanks for the beautiful memories. :)

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed this one Valeigh. Thank you for the wonderful comment :) Julie

[Ruth]

Beautiful form! Carries the poem fluidly and the imagery, well..just breathtaking love xx

[MsJewel]

Thank you Poppy! :) Julie

[Lydia Shutter]

Such a fine form for your graceful lacy words, Julie! I could picture a ballet dancer...indeed she looks like a butterfly. There is something so peaceful about the mood you created with your imagery. Wonderful. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you Lydi! Have a beautiful weekend! Hugs, Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

I admire people who have the patience to figure out the different forms of poetry and arrange thoughts inside them. This flows so easily. I have no such skill set, as writing is kind of a mental burst and the best I can do is a senryu, or make up some rhyme scheme of my own. A fine piece of work this is.

[MsJewel]

Thank you. I find forms frustrating...however, when I'm experiencing writers block I have found they help. This one is a very simple form. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. :) Julie

[B.J]

your welcome

[B.J]

delicate writing absolutely beautiful

[MsJewel]

Thank you Barb :) Julie