Splish Splash

~ a rainy spring afternoon fantasy ~

photograph compliments of pinterest

 

 

 

The soft pitter patter of spring rain

is the perfect compliment

to an April afternoon

 

A gift of love

for the beauty of the earth

and a beautiful field of daisies

and a poet who dreams of flying…

 

If I could paint you a rainbow

with the colors of my love

I would….

 

If my heart had wings

 

Yes,

I love the spring rain

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

A simple concept, but one which almost everyone would relate; who doesn't enjoy the early rain? The smell and feeling of petrichor, as the earth lets loose her hidden blood. The only part of this that I think has an issue is the second stanza; you repeat 'and', usually we add more ands than we need and it makes our writing stagnant. In fact, usually we can remove it without even replacing it! I also recommend varying your word choice for 'beauty' since you repeat it as well. And honestly, while beauty is a great idea, the word is so overused that it has lost much of its magic. I recommend trying to use metaphors here to make the sentences more powerful and more unique; after all, the first word people think of when they see a field of flowers is 'beautiful', choose something less predictable. Good Luck!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for sharing some great ideas. I do tend to use the word beauty or beautiful too often. I will definitely try some of your ideas. Have a beautiful day :) Julie

[MsJewel]

oopps...did it again. Have a fabulous day! stunning, lovely....LOL...
:)

[Nusquam Esse]

*cough* Ostentatious Occasions I do say, I mean... Indubitably... :P

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem for the warm rain. I need a warm Spring day. Photo and words made me wish for a tropical place. Thank you dear Poet for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words. Hurry spring! :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree and you are welcome.

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮This is so sweet. I'm not a huge fan of rain, but sometimes I find it nice. Also, I love the font you used here. It fits perfectly with the piece. Great poem!╰☆╮

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh this is so fabulous, I love the rain, I could watch it for hours… your poem is so eloquent, blissful and has such a carefree attitude. I so love your poetry.

[MsJewel]

Thank you my dear friend. I love the rain as well..unfortunately we haven't had much of it this year...Rain dance anyone? Hugs, Julie

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I know we haven't either, thank you for blessing us with your beautiful thoughts.

[Ruth]

Something refreshing about it, isn't there? You do such vision immense justice...brings a whole new feeling to April showers - makes them achingly pleasurable! x

[star73]

I love spring and summer I live in Wisconsin and it's beautiful how the four seasons change we just had a long winter it's just now starting to be nice yea!

[MsJewel]

Enjoy your beautiful weather! :) Julie

[star73]

oh most certain it's sad when we have long winter's gets depressing.

[Desert Knave]

Such a beautiful write. We have clouds here in Phoenix ... and it smells of distant rain, but it looks like dust is all we will get. ~Jim

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[B.J]

Such dreams of a spring day. The love of spring is beautiful around the world. I enjoy your work it is as lovely as spring

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Barb! :) Julie

[B.J]

Your welcome

[Woody]

I like this poem. a spring rain, unlike winter rain can be beautiful. people are accustomed to beautiful sunsets and flowers and butterflies in poetry. this brings to mind: I am singing in the rain.
beautiful poem.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie

[Woody]

pleasure. I enjoyed it :)

[Rebecca Buller]

Ah, a nice spring shower. Little is more pleasing than a gentle rain from heaven. Lovely:)

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie