I Write...

~ a heartprint ~

 

 

 

Heaven can wait

yet it didn’t

 

with pen in hand

and poems, prayers and promises

in my heart

 

I write

 

for the memory of his ocean eyes

midnight blue in peaceful tides

 

for his kiss

as warm as a sunbeam brushing

my lips with golden  kissed

daisy smiles

 

his breath as soft as the breeze

tickling my cheek

 

I write

 

A daisy a day

for the tides in midnight blue

and the beauty of his touch

for the serenity of my soul

and the one who couldn’t wait

 

I write

Reviews

[dan]

Julie, A very intriguing presentation, it allows you to set the table with earlier lines and culminate with the summation in the last stanza, all of it interspersed with 'I write' to punctuate your thoughts. This is really impressive, Julie; it would have been very good had you laid it out differently, but the way you do so allows some thoughts to seem as if they are separate without interrupting the overall flow. This is a very impressive piece, Julie, well written and well received. take care...dan

[MsJewel]

Thank so much Dan. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

[ANTO]

You open this with a fabulous line Julie - if only we could use such a veto with Heaven - Im sure it would be pretty much empty.

Your descriptive powers at their best here - beautiful imagery - especially of the eyes.
The repetition of the title not only ties it all in a loving bow but reminds us that love hurts as much as it gives pleasure.

Thank you for posting this. :)

[MsJewel]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for your lovely comment Anto :) Julie

[Jamestown]

Friend this is heartbreaking and at the same time so unbelievably beautiful!
I am so sorry for your loss and truly wish I was reading another one of
your amazing pieces of poetry! I thank you so much for sharing
something I'm sure is close to your kind heart! God bless you!

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and compassionate words my sweet friend. :) Julie

[Jamestown]

Of course, you are welcome and b-blessed!

[Rise_From_Ice]

Very beautiful and sweet. I love it, and am inspired to find a love like this myself.
~Rise~

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie

[Honey.K]

Very touching and sweet words . I really enjoyed reading this poem. I love the expressions you used. Thanks for sharing :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words. :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Julie. Words are sweet and powerful.
"A daisy a day
for the tides in midnight blue
and the beauty of his touch
for the serenity of my soul
and the one who couldn’t wait
I write"
The above lines left me with peace and beauty. I like the thoughts and the want to write. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely words :) Julie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Julie.

[Lydia Shutter]

(((((Julie))))))) the emotion in this one is overpowering! Yes, you write for him and we all benefit from it because the words are just gorgeous. "A daisy a day".....heavy sigh. Bittersweet romance. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely review Lydi :) Julie