Creeping murk

So many screams muffled into silences

Silences that echoed through the walls

Walls that wept blood, night and day

The blood clotted and turned black

As black as her sooty eyes.

Reviews

[Solar]

A dark and mysterious poem, an ambiguity that allows the reader to read between the lines.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Solar!

[J. D. Moran]

Eerie!
Fantastic poem. Very dark, which is great :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you!

[Blackheart]

Damn. Downright awesome. Such a dark theme.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind review.

[McBear]

I really liked this.. I don't mean to nail you but, did you forget periods? Comment on this if you didn't and ill stop mentioning it :p

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

No it was intentional, since it adds weight to the flow.
Why? You think it needs some?

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well mentioning any issue related grammar is not a problem at all. I am very well aware of my incompetence with grammar and I am willing to learn for good.

[McBear]

I see what you're saying. The reader can add in their own grammar to affect how they read it? Kinda like a custom experience. Is that what you mean?

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes, kinda. But to give a raw feel, like such technicalities are forgotten kinda.

[McBear]

I understand completely. I suggest you put that into the desc of the poem so people will know c:

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well thank you for the suggestion. I surely will, as soon as I can get my hand on PC.

[McBear]

c: Okay, no problem. Thank you for taking my suggestions and staying in touch with me c:

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are very welcome. It is nice to have you, here.

[McBear]

Same to you my friend. Keep up the amazing work!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Same there!

[Wolf_Lord]

Poems are funny things... Really they do not in some instances require punctuation at all. However, in this case I would put a semicolon instead of a comma here (blood, night) and eliminate the period at the end to keep it consistent.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your suggestions..

[zunie frost]

great work !!!!! i like it ...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind visit, Zunie.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Glad, you liked it. :)

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!!

[Dani The Unreviewed]

Let me guess, emotional, and/or physical abuse... dark write, and i like it.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Open for interpretations.
Thank you, Danny.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

you are welcome :)

[An owl on the moon]

How such a deeply moving darkness flows through your words, like a misted river. Your thoughts are forged in fire. Amazing rhythm and voice!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your insightful review, Craig. Glad to hear from you!

[MelissaAndres]

This could be about emotional abuse and/or physical abuse or just a ghostly vampire/witch-type person - it could be whatever the reader deems it to be. When a piece is open to interpretation, that is the sign of a good writer. Nice job!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you, Melissa for your insightful review!

[MelissaAndres]

You are very welcome!

[Eliot Knight]

For me, it reminded me of abuse and how the abused person's voice is never heard. Perhaps it wasn't meant to be so graphic but it spoke to me that way. I always enjoy reading your writings. Keep up the good work :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your insightful review. Means a lot!

[Rajah de AzinPrinz Phyb..]

Hauntingly graphic. Sets the mood and makes me feel like it's right outside the door. Very good work.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! Glad you liked it.