Awaiting Ruins

The minutes turned into hours

Hours into days, days into months

And months into years

Eons slipped by while she kept waiting

For nothing but a glimpse of him

Her eyes were empty and dry now

But a well was accumulated of her tears

Brimming and dripping droplets of blood

Author's Note

Originally, written for a writing challenge by Bear.
Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

Tear of blood and it does seem to go there sometimes. Very nice.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind review.

[FaeryQueen]

i strongly appease this poem, i am also waiting.........................

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Hope your wait ends soon Khatoon.
Thank you for your review.

[Bear]

Great depth in so few words, and you convey the emotions well, plus you use a much better picture than I did Ha! Ha! Masterfully written my friend, well done :~)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you so much Bear!

[Tks]

This is a nice piece of work, but the only line that really caught my attention was "brimming and dripping droplets of blood". It felt like this lacked your usual natural passion, and it seemed slightly forced upon. Nevertheless, the penmanship again is of good quality, well done!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind honest review. It's much appreciated!

[Tks]

Anytime buddy, you are a damn talented writer. Nice picture, by the way, I appreciate your knack for choosing good pictures. It is a skill few have

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much, I am learning and appreciation encourages a lot!

[Tks]

That's the spirit!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

dark and powerful........
sometimes "waiting" can leave a changed landscape in the end........
well written i loved it!
:)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much, glad you liked it.

[Einstein Noodle]

your poem describes her situation very well .. first three lines are cliche' driven .. not sure it works for me in this one ... the closing three lines are striking to me ..the introduction of blood at the end is powerful .. :)
E.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for the kind review. It is much appreciated.

[Cassie]

This is such a bad feeling, waiting for some one knowing very well he will never show up but still holding on to some hope

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Yes indeed.
Thank you for your kind comment.

[zaisham9393]

Loved the poem Jyoti ;)) thank you so much for sharing ;)!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice ending to the poem. I liked how you led to the strong ending. Left the reader with visions of sadness and blood. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Perkele.7885]

It would help in my appreciation of your poem Jyoti if I had an inkling of what or whom that you might be waiting for. If I am going to be judgmental in my review, as you are asking your readers to be, I need some information that I do not have. I do not know who Bearis?

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for taking your time to review my work.
Bear is great poet and reviewer here at WC. (http://www.writerscafe.org/BearMage)
He had put up a challenge a while ago of writing something based on a picture he had posted and that picture was of a water droplet falling and merging in the water. So the first thing that came to my mind was tears.
Now, this could be taken as a mourning of someone passed away and whose absence had led her to such an unstable state or it could be about a cheated wife/lover who despite his moving on in life, is still stuck there.

PS: Personally, I would like to think its the former for that is what happened when I lost my dad.

[Perkele.7885]

now. at least it all make at least a little bit of sense to this old wandering lad!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

I am glad if it is more clear now.