Awaiting Ruins

The minutes turned into hours

Hours into days, days into months

And months into years

Eons slipped by while she kept waiting

For nothing but a glimpse of him

Her eyes were empty and dry now

But a well was accumulated of her tears

Brimming and dripping droplets of blood

Author's Note

Originally, written for a writing challenge by Bear.
Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

Reviews

[MelissaAndres]

Very good job, Jyoti! Sadness, wistfulness. Everything flows so well. I liked the picture you chose too!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much Melissa for your kind review.

[MelissaAndres]

You are very welcome!

[Valentine]

With so many lonely fish waiting in the sea to just have a chance at being caught...this seems like a very sad waste. Valentine

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Although, that was not my intention behind this piece, but it could be taken in that way.
It was intended as a mourning song.
Thank you for your kind words.

[Emily]

I love it!
The picture is very cool too!
I really liked the end!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind comment.

[Saddam]

Eons slipped by while she kept waiting
For nothing but a glimpse of him.

It is heart touching and feeling is coming through.
Great capture in just few lines.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you for your kind comment.

[Relic]

Glimpse of his...........what?

I think more detail would help make it better.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Oops! that was a typo.
I actually intended to write 'him'.
Thank you for the comment. It is much appreciated.