Bewilderment

just lost..

Time is slipping on the sundial,

taking my life away.

Neither, do I want it to stop,

nor, do I want it to sway.

Let me get down to earth,

maybe, I will live again.

Or let my soul drift free,

passing onto another land...

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is expected.
Thank you for your time.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

I have just spelling and grammar corrections for you as I liked the poem!
Title: Bewilderment
Line 1 "on" the sundial
Line 3 Neither, "do" I
Line 4 Nor,.......want "it"
Line 6 Maybe,

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you very much for your kind help.
Maybe, it is better now?

[Perkele.7885]

I would still put a comma after neither and nor.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Cool. How about now?