Stomping on Rhymes

Frustration. Feeling superficial.

lovely current
inciting word
always seen
but going unheard

stack them up
to flow with the time
string them together
stomp on some rhymes

us poets, we listen
pens stand at attention
but why do i attend
this silent convention?

i set myself up
so easily to fall
writing my scriptures
of nothing at all

wait for inspiration
it`ll come in due time
vainly i`ll stomp
on my trivial rhymes

Reviews

[Confidential]

Do the world a favor: keep writing poems like this one. Okay? Okay.
Has an amazingly smooth rhythm in it, and even better, that rhythm is achieved without muddling the poems message for the sake of having a good flow. To achieve both of those things (a good message which is easily interpreted, and a good, catchy rhythm to the way the poem is actually written) is something that unfortunately, not all poems possess. This one does though, I genuinely loved it! My absolute favorite part of this great piece was the whole fourth stanza. For some reason, the whole poem, but that fourth stanza in particular, remind me (vaguely) of the Beatles' song 'Eleanor Rigby'. A highly enjoyable read.

Respect,
-Confidential