My Enough is You

trying the romance

the years pass 

faster than we realise

but looking back 

at you 

at me 

at us 

i can see 

what we together 

have created 

a life 

passion is life 

for us 

and 

we have fought 

oh, we have fought 

i have always held fire

you have always 

doused me away 

in stubbornness 

yet 

we always shared 

a common goal 

the best 

simply the best 

for each other 

i cannot deny 

my love for you 

for it has grown 

into something 

much bigger than

both of us 

it contains us 

and yet still 

finds ways 

of blossoming anew

you let me be me

i know who you are 

although we are opposites 

with my head in the clouds 

you always at the ready to

reel me back 

keeping me grounded 

for my own good 

and yet 

you have always let me soar

knowing every inch of my body 

your love is expressed 

in the complete adoration 

in our lovemaking 

finding new treasures

to take us momentarily away 

longer, deeper, further

attaining new levels of 

complete bliss

abandonment

ecstasy

unadulterated pleasure

 

only serving to bring us 

closer together

to know someone 

completely 

honestly 

to accept them 

completely 

honestly 

to love them 

completely 

honestly 

that is a love 

above love 

reserved for 

the fortunate 

who are awake enough 

to know 

‘when is enough’

my enough 

is everything that is 

you

Author's Note

so some of you know that I am trying to get my head around free verse ... love to know your HONEST reactions please ... feel free to critique, I am here to learn :)

Reviews

[wordman]

this is a beautiful poem of love and the feelings that come with it
great job

[KWP]

thanks for reading kind sir xx

[wordman]

you are nd thanks for the fr

[Einstein Noodle]

when i looked i said to myself ..oh ..its longgggggg! ... but the reading was fluid and gentle ...the form made me work out the pauses .. which i like .. i felt a little uncomfortable because of the obvious honesty about your private love and life .. (i am basically shy) you stuck to the plain as far as language, relying on creating a deep literal impression .. i think your X rated verse might have been XX without being distasteful .. and i kept looking for creative and original phrases .. perhaps finding a way to say the same thing with more color ... i love what you have shared about love .. perhaps your poem says it best as is .. real love stands in the face of the mundane and the obstacles of differences .. things i have tried to learn and teach my children .. ;)
E.

[KWP]

This review is fantastic and I thank you so much for your honest words ... You know I write these words from beginning to end in less than three minutes and so I agree with you one hundred percent about the lack of colorful words (my problem is I always get so damn excited about the little things in life. And posting a new poem is a little thing...I still need to learn a wee bit of patience) I have gained much for your words E and I appreciate them more than you know ...

I am amused at you saying what you did about the 'private love' ... Hehe wasn't it you who referred to your hippie era where love was free and plentiful ... ;-) ... I shall not get you to review the we. Scenes in the novel I am writing then ... You may ban me for life ...

Your reviews make me smile ... And I thank you xxx

[Einstein Noodle]

we can and do change eh!? AprilRN is provocative and Freida is in between .. your expression makes me blush because it is your own very private life .. an honest peek .. so i blush a bit.. so glad you found my comments helpful .. please dont exclude me from the novel ... i am old .. not dead .. and anything the gets the neurons snapping is appreciated ;)
E.

[KWP]

hahaha I wrote this because my husband does not get me writing poetry at all ... he never reads anything either ... which is fine we are so different and yet still the same ... he asked me a long time ago to write something for him ... I never did, but it has always been there calling out for me to write..
now I know that if I am struck with death tomorrow he will always have this :) ... not being morbid , i mean life is ever flowing and all ..

ok novel yes ... when done I would love you to read .. but it is not just sex you know ...

love to you E - from another E xx

[Einstein Noodle]

thats so cool! its something he will treasure always

[KWP]

we shall see ...

[Ayushi]

You have depicted love in it's purest and simplest form. I just loved this write.
"yet
we always shared
a common goal
the best
simply the best
for each other "

[KWP]

thank you beautiful gal ... means a lot ... that is what I was aiming at x x

[Edward Lancheister]

good poem with a words of love that bind between two character completed each other or could be a soul search for a part to match

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is good free verse...no rhyme and yet there is a rhythm to it...there is a pulse, a beat.

"my enough/ is everything that is/ you."

this poem depicts a realistic and very mature love...one that has the understanding that love is not enough to make a relationship work...it is the understanding that times will sometimes be rough...and it is the willingness to work through those patches that makes love real and lasting...
and makes the physical lovemaking that much better.

[KWP]

thanks for reading Jacob - tell me does the distaste of adverbs trickle its way into poetry the same way it does creative writing? I just read completely and honestly over in this poem and cringed ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

why? adjectives and adverbs add to the descriptive quality of a writing, whether it be a story, an essay or a poem...
nothing wrong with descriptive words at all....your writing shows..that is important..
no need to cringe...
showing is much better than telling.

i guess there are different schools of thought...

my prose is always poetic...but contains many adjectives and adverbs...hell i could rid of the verbs and be happy.

[KWP]

oh I have been listening to a creative writing course recently and some believe that adverbs 'ly' words are a lazy way of writing as we could possibly find other / better words instead - cheers for getting back to me - appreciated :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i absolutely, vehemently disagree wholeheartedly.

[Cory Barrett]

First, i am awake at 3 in the morning. I just walked out of the bedroom, and looking at my wife asleep i thought "no words can express how much love i have for you". But then I read your writing only minutes later, and I stand happily corrected.

As for your writing I am only an infant in poetry, so I can give you know professional advice. I will say for me personally i thought it was easy to read, which I like. Removing the effort for the reader, is some times a very nice thing to do. When I write I reserve single word lines for very dramatic points, but that might just be something I do. I find it helps me make a stark statement with out having to use, frivolous vocabulary or punctuation.

I really enjoyed reading this in this early morning, thank you for your hard work.

[KWP]

Hey hey, I appreciate your thought out review and you have given me a couple of points to take on board .. thanks.

Now - it's three in the morn ... go back to bed !!