Hitch Hiker with Intention

... oh just allowing my mind right of passage ...

I open my heart 

to the distant whispers of love that

hitch hike through eternity 

seeking a momentary perch 

with souls whom welcome light

the caress of the whispers 

lead me into abandon

my interior, exterior, 

flesh, thought, moments, heartbeats, 

feeling, emotion and ideas - dishevel 

caressing the me 

it’s ok to fade

there’s no need to be 

the whispers clasp my hand 

I drift,

I crumble, come apart, disband 

I am carried along in the

winds of time 

I atomise 

I disunite

to reunite 

with whence I came 

I am a hitch hiker and I  offer 

the sweetest whispers of love …..

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

wonder filled journey .. i pick up the hitch hiker and lo and behold the hitch hiker takes me, the vehicle, for a ride ...if i go ...if i trust ...i dissolve and mystic me ... i become that hitch hiker looking for another "ride" ..i think this is quite brilliant ..another for me ol' library to peruse ... the circle complete the energy blissful ... nice one my friend!
E.

[KWP]

you wanna come on a nomadic hitch hike with me? first stop - the stars ...... XX

[Einstein Noodle]

i love this poem of yours ..dont ask twice girl .. i am ready ... thumb out ..head high ... ruk sack on m'stick! to the stars and beyoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnd!

[Kgorometja]

I see exactly what you meant when you talked about showing and not telling. Its very visual and kind of pulls one in. I especially like the way it flows from one stanza to another, you're a next level type of good

[KWP]

there is another poem I wrote which is my best attempt for imagery and metaphoric style - wel actually there are two The Fine Art of leaveing Without a Trace and Let Us Eat MAngo - scroll through my comments on the second one you will see a revised version (much better) will give you an idead of imagery ... love to hear your thoughts on both - I workshopped these poems in a free online Poetry course I did - happy days XX

[Kgorometja]

I'll check them out right away

[R Smith]

This is one your best and the best I've read in a long time, love ya Oz Queen and I'm keeping you in my library X

[wordman]

you are a time traveler my dear,you carry those emotions to reality
loved the write !