Surrender

The ancient art of surrendering oneself 

to the eternal

is all but lost. 

Many don't even own a white flag. 

Choosing instead to fly their own

colours, patterns, pictures. 

To give up the fight

doesn’t mean to give up individuality. 

Projecting our own reality 

through the cinema of mind 

creating you and I.

Thank you for inviting me to your screening.

The library of reality projections, 

is always full, 

we never seem to borrow another’s life.

I digress, 

it’s time to undress,

unveil your naked soul, 

tilt your head back,

exhale, 

give up the fight for this reality life. 

Moment to moment.

We. Keep. Fighting.

Stop.

Let us find the more.

Reviews

[DiskartetHaraya]

I've only seen the preview which included the part about white flags and own colors and I was already hooked. That within-two-sentences transition was slick. Overall I had the feeling that you have a very good grasp of language.

That "thank you" was unexpected but not jarring; the message somehow continued. I think the extended wordplay from screening to borrowing another's life prepared me for the digression, from which you'd bring me back from at the last line.

That little tension in between with so few words felt like a "tut tut tut" just before a calming exhale of "Let us find the more."

[KWP]

Thanks my friend for your thought out review :D ... I am glad you like it ... this is very much a stream of consciousness piece ... X