Thrown It Away

I am hypnotized 
By your body
Lost in my own head
Everything about you
Is making me insane
But only in a good way
Your laugh keeps me in a trance
Your eyes show me the life we could have
If only I hadn't thrown it away

Reviews

[Broken.]

I agree, bittersweet, but I can relate to it quite well. I like poems that describe a paradox of emotions in just a few lines. Nice work.

Great work. short but pointed. Kind of scattered thoughts and feelings fighting to be real.

[Journey21]

very nice... short, bitter sweet.

[pickle]

good job on this one

[SpokenWord]

It felt like you were admiring him from a far, how did you throw it all away? why did you? very good write.

[Revolutionary]

Welcome to no sugar coating,the group you joined wher we give constructive feedback.I realize that you are 16 and that your depth will change.Push the envelope a little(.I am hypnotized by your naked body)
It is risky to start a line with but.Try that line without the but.

all of this is just suggestion from no sugar coating

your eyes show me an alternate reality

[Undying Glory]

nice job here, this was great stuff, methinks. this reflects the bitter reality of our lives, such that we don't realize what we have until it's all gone. nice job!

[Linear]

Lots and lots of if only's on this road we call life, but wiyh each one we learn a little, how to play the game, and maybe even win. I liked this poem of yours, well done

[Jim Parson]

This was so uplifting and then you brought me crashing down to the ground. A really good write! Don't stop!

[poetic soul]

in a good way seems to be alright!!!
but ending is sad...nice one...i like the way it began and ended...very different...