Swarm of thoughts !!

Arises a Swarm of thoughts, bugs you-hand moves on- and here-forth comes up the write...:-)

Swarm of thoughts-

withering and slithering

My feelings-

pipping and popping

My existence-

dwindling and doodling

I myself-

grumbling and pondering

The situations-

falling and rising

I myself-

gathering and handling

                                                I trying-

 laughing and cheering

                                               Instances-

 hardening and teasing

                                             

Life-

contradicting and annoying

Values- 

shattering and speaking

Wind-

moving and shoving

Me again-

falling and standing

Life-

Feebling and deeming

Ouch !!

these feelings, and sighing's

Smoky the existence, when surrounds-the 'Swarm of Thoughts'

Metta !!

The Kanchan

Image courtesy: Devian Art !!

Reviews

[McKenna]

I really like it! I'm not poetic enough to really understand poetry, I think, but I found it enjoyable! I liked that I could read it by going back and forth, but also as two separate pieces. I don't know if that was intended, so I hope it's OK! Great piece :)

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Thank you McKenna, simply tried to jot down the feels of the moment...:-)

[symmetryAsymmetry]

great choice of words! Very inspiring.. :)

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

:-) Thanks ya so much... Spirits boosted :-)

[Akshat♥]

All these thoughts are just wonderful...
The way you write is so nice :)
Touched my heart !!
Thanks for sharing this lovely write :)

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Thanks ya Akshat :)

[zainul]

Thoughts swarm like honeybees.
They may also fly like geese.
Sometimes they come as butterflies.
They may sparkle and charm our eyes.
Thoughts may surprise us like woodpecker.
They may swoop like blue-red kingfisher.
Your golden piece inspired me to write some verses.
This is really a wonderful and enlightening work.
Congratulations!!!

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Oh wow, u wrote it so welll....Gracias fr ur words :-)
All smiles :)

[zainul]

Adore your lovely comment,golden poet :-)

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Thanks ya again :)

[zainul]

:)

[Elaenor Aisling]

interesting style and structure, a well written piece.

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Gracias :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the set-up of the poem. Giving different thoughts in each set of sentences. Our mind's will never rest. Always trying to understand why things happen in a life? Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

Thank you Much for your words Coyote...:-)

[Hotwater]

Super swarm!... like it!

*bird*

[Kanchan Ojha "Eureka"]

thank U @hotwater..:-)