An ocean within myself

I was depressed and wrote what ever came in my mind.

                               An ocean within myself

Do not search for answers in my eyes I have come a long way far,

Far, far away where I lived with my innocence now I find myself

Standing in the middle of several places, which are so vivid in my mind

That they bring a rush to my blood, I am young at heart but feel painfully

Lifeless, so insecure, so scared that when the waves within me get higher,

Higher and higher then the walls of my scruples, I scream, I shout and panic

But no one can hear me because it is my battle against

 

The ocean built within myself.

Author's Note

I hope i make sense in this poem.

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

A great read and write, a strong emotional piece about the inner insecurities of life and living. It can be such a hard time and hard moments in our lives that seem like crashing waves trying to hold us down. Drown us in our own insecurities

Well done

Matthew

Dearest friend. This peice speaks to me for I am myself insecure. It is a remarkable peice Guria.

[dfz]

i read the title and started the poem with a great picture in my mind of waves and i was curious at how you were going to add the ocean part to this peice but it worked so well at the end and was such a good closer

[Faceless Love]

This piece is powerful. Well written.

[deeps]

Such powerful emotion here. This is well expressed.

[J.S. Pua]

this, I like..
an emotive piece..
good work..

[Dream Weaver]

Self doubt leads to failure everytime.
If you feel insecure and hopeless,
then that is what you become just
that. Being positive once in a while
or dare I say trusting of others
could remedy the problem. Everyone
has some insecurities but it's how
you conquer them which is the most
satisfying. Always remember you are
not alone in this.

[SJ]

You've done it again, you really know how to express yourself through words. In such a short piece you have put across so much emotion, it's really powerful.

Keep writing.

[HorrorMaster]

I thought it was good. :)