"Goin' Crazy" Parody

A song by Natalie called "Goin' Crazy" of which this is a parody addressing my tumultuous relationship with my mother.

Original Song Lyrics:

Ever since the day you went away and left me lonely and cold
My life just hasn't been the same oh baby, no
When I looked into your eyes the moment that I let you go
I just broke down

Baby if I ever get the chance to be with you again I would sacrifice
Cuz the feeling that I feel within 
No other man would ever make me feel so right
It's nice to smile when I get your phone call at night
But I'd rather have you here with me, right next to me
I miss the way you hold me tight

[Bridge]
I gotta let you know I feel so weak without your touch
I never thought that I could ever love a man so much
I gotta let you know I think that we are destiny
For you I'd cross the world, for you I'd do anything

[Chorus 2x]
That's right baby. I'm going crazy

Gotta be your lady
I've been thinking lately
That you and me, yes we can make it
Just ride with me, roll with me, I'm in love with you baby

Break it down now, I'll tell you what I feel
From the moment that I met you, its been so damn real
My heart seems to skip another beat
Every time we speak, I can't believe I feel so weak
Tell me that you really need me and you want me and you miss me
And you love me I'm your lady
I'll be around waiting for you. I'll put it down, be the woman for you

I'm falling so deep for you, crazy over for you
I'm calling, calling out to you, what am I going to do?
It's true, no fronting
It's you and no other, I can no longer go on without you 
I'll just break down

[Bridge]

[Chorus 2x]

Parody Song Lyrics:

Ever since the day you went away, I haven't been lonely or cold
My life just hasn't been the same, oh Mama, no
When I looked into your eyes the moment that I let you go
I just felt free

Mama if I ever get the chance to be with you again I would laugh like twice
Cuz the feeling that I feel within 
Is that another Mama has made me feel so right
It's twice as nice when I don't get your phone call at night
Cuz I don't want you here with me or next to me
You never once held me tight

[Bridge]
I gotta let you know I feel so free without your touch
I never thought that I could ever hate my mom so much
I gotta let you know I think that it's our destiny
For us to part, for us to break, I'm so sorry

[Chorus 2x]
That's right Mommy, not going crazy
Don't wanna be your lady
I've been thinking lately
That you and me, no we can't make it
Don't ride with me, or roll with me, I'm okay without you, Mommy.

Break it down now, I'll tell you what I feel
From the time I was a kid, you ain't never once been real
My heart seems to sink right to my feet
Every time we speak, cuz I can't believe you're so damn weak
You don't me tell me that you really need me or want me or miss me
But you claim you love me, I'm your lady
I won't be around waiting around for you. I'll lay it down, I'm not the daughter for you 

I'm bawlin, livin life without you, not crazy over you
I was calling, calling out to you, what am I gonna do?

But you kept fronting

It's me on my own now, I can no longer go on beside you 
And I won't break down

[Bridge]
I gotta let you know I feel so free without your touch
I never thought that I could ever hate my mom so much
I gotta let you know I think that it's our destiny
For us to part, for us to break, I'm so sorry

[Chorus 2x]
That's right Mommy, not going crazy
Don't wanna be your lady
I've been thinking lately
That you and me, no we can't make it
Don't ride with me, or roll with me, I'm okay without you, Mommy.

Author's Note

Here's a link to the original song if you don't know it. I would love some constructive criticism on this piece, so if you can, listen to the original and see if I did well... :) Thanks!
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=brvtZZj54D4

Reviews

[Ayushi Jha]

Beautiful! A very fresh style

[annalysiar]

You did well for this I know this song,
and I like your flow, the emotion. Is good.
this is a great attempt, even better write. Just uh don't use mommy, unless you wanted to make fun. I couldn't get that lol. I'd use something like ma or mama. On your verse I'd change lady to baby I just got it lol.
great write all in all I loved it. Love the song too. I can relate hun. This has potential

[Dani The Unreviewed]

hehehehe hehehehe hehehehe :D
it's so funny :D
I'm cracking up! lol.
i listened to the original song, and then imagined the parody version being recorded... Hahahahaha Hahahahaha ... :'D
very well done

[KarMarBar]

Thanks! This was my first attempt at a parody, and song-writing as a whole for that matter. I'm glad you listened to the original and got a good kick out of my parody! :)

[Inject Positivity]

Well your parody version could be a great song too....Loved the lyrics and you have brilliantly created the parody....Well done.....I have heard the original song and i think there cannot be any better parody than this.....

[KarMarBar]

I'm so glad you've heard the original, so you can see how I lined up the parody lyrics to the original ones, and can possibly imagine how it would sound recorded. Thanks for saying there could not have been a better parody of this song. I really appreciate your kind words and for taking the time out to read and review my work! :)

[A hare off]

Great writing, a fantastic parody of that song. Have you tried singing it to the music?

[KarMarBar]

I have. However, I'm a writer and not a singer. I have a horrible voice and I cannot sing to save my life, but I still tried. Maybe auto-tune or another female singer can help me out. Thanks for the review! Happy New Year!

[FreedomFighter]

i enjoyed it, i wish u luck in your future endeavors

[KarMarBar]

Thanks for taking the time to read it and post a review. I appreciate that.

[wordman]

you did a great write,i can see a top 10

[KarMarBar]

Thanks! :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome