E-Blow Job

First there was sex

then cam sex

and then flirt sex

afterwards virtual sex

do we all get vexed

in the subtext

while i'm on the subject

I must object

Am I the object

of your affection

or am I the reflection

of your intentions

do you reckoned

my life that you beckoned

it there a lesson

for this session

I need your attention

Don't text me away

Don't e-mail away

say it to my face

that you dont love me anyway

Your just a fake

like a E-Blow Job

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ian H Morrison]

brilliaant written with passion making a point that sadly is so true

[Karen666]

I actually think this poem sucks. I hate it.

[J.Black]

LOL! The E-blowjob! Very honest, and witty.

[Nothing Personal]

I like the fact that you use a modern connotation such as webcam sex to make your point..A lot of people may not appreciate this but I get your point and it's good..Your rhyme schemes is a bit forced but it works..You can use free verse don't feel compelled to use rhyme..and there are other schemes you can use..As to the message you want to convey, it's well done and in a fresh way. Bold but appreciated..

[JC]

contemporary...my spellin sucks.

[JC]

hah! thats f****n contemprary writing right there.

[Jim Parson]

I'm sure it's total coincidence that this is the first piece of yours I've read. I'm hooked and off to read more.

[Coyote Poetry]

Nothing wrong with this poem. Straight to the point and honest. I will never understand people who use computers as their purpose in sex. Too many real and alive people are out there wanting the same things. A excellent ending to a very good poem. Thank you.
Coyote

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I see that your reviews are mostly from men!! Can't see why LOL..clever, funny piece

[GTVile]

I would try to reword the "do you reckoned" line, but beyond that, I like it. Its got a very modern vibe in its use of rhyme and rhythm, plus the reference to all the modern technology. Most importantly, the message is loud and clear, and that's the whole point. Good job.