Where Were You?

Where were you
in my heart, I wonder.
And where will you be
when I need someone there?
You were gone. I was over.
Oh why? I wonder.
And where will you be
on the day that I die?

Where are you
while I hide from thunder?
And where wil you be
when the thunder is gone?
You just run from the thunder,
leaving me exposed.
And where will you be
on the day that I die?

Where were you
when the water flooded?
And where will you be
when I swim to the shore?
You were gone, like the thunder,
while I'm sinking under.
And where were you
on the day that I died?

I lived through heartbreak
when you left me crying.
I lived through thunder,
when you hid from the storm.
But I drowned in the water,
while you sailed away.
You were on a sailing ship
on the day that I died.

Author's Note

I know it's not as good as my other work, but poetry isn't really my thing. :/ Well tell me what you think anyway. Thanks :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem had a nice flow to it. I like the use of repetition in the poem. I like poetry with questions. Bring the reader into the poem or story. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[teardrop]

wow i really enjoy this piece.
such a sound of lonliness and sadness comes through.

[KurKota]

I liked this ..... creates a feeling very well. You did a good job of conveying a sense of "nothingness" when someone you wanted to be there....wasn't !!

[Jordan's Back]

I think this work is among one of your powerful write, Its Sharpness and depth cuts clear to the core of the reader allowing this feeling of emptiness wash over you. Amazing Job!

[Eliott]

Thanks, I think I dreamt about it because I woke up with it in my head

[Jordan's Back]

I love it!

[Felicity's Eve]

Very wonderfully written and relatable :)

[Eliott]

Thanks :D

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[InsanityWriter]

Very nice poem. :) Good job!!

[Bella Luna]

I really like this! I think we can all relate to this. There's always that one person you want to be around and they just never seem to be there exactly when you need them :/ Seriously great poem!