Sweetness

A poem for you poets.

Your touch lingering

As I melt your gleaming skin

Honey becomes me.  

Author's Note

A poem for you poets.

Reviews

[KeeD]

The aftertaste of this poem lingers on the mind, if I was diabetic i'd be in a coma right now from all the sweetness this Haiku radiates. This is a very personal and very sensual poem to me as I perceive it's essence I understand what it means to me and I blush.

[Katiya K]

Hahaha oh my! Maybe you should be the poet and not I!
Ah so you know the very core of this poem - I'm glad :)

I feel accomplished when I can at least get some sort of reaction from a reader so thank you!

[Writer #00]

Haiku are very short; however, it is this shortness that makes them harder to write...well. It's nice to read a good haiku, which you provided here. I love how each line connects with one another, sort of like the way honey flows off of a spoon, until it plops down in a satisfying golden glob at the end with the interestingly phrased 'honey becomes me' as opposed to 'I become honey'. The way you phrased it made me realize that you are saying honey is BECOMING the character, not the other way around, and thereby establishing a synchronicity between the two through analogy. I also love how the poem can be applied to many varying situations from platonic love between a mother and son to something as fervent as romance. Well done : )

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[Katiya K]

Your imagery of my haiku made me smile and I am glad to have inspired such a thought. I am so happy that you understood how this poem can mean very different things from a persons point of view. Thank you once again for your reviewing! Your comments make me smile :)

[Writer #00]

Making people smile makes me smile so thank you for smiling... ^^'

[Trevor Jay Bloodworth]

I like how you have to think about it a little bit. You don't just understand it after one quick read (or at least I didn't). Good stuff.

[Katiya K]

Thank you for the read! Yes, there are many things that this poem might refer too and I wrote it too sort of nudge the reader into imagination.