For Those with a Similar Aspiration

Incredible doesn't have to be high to soar
Beautiful light should be yours
A day where all you have to do is breathe
But it keeps falling apart.
A gold-rush mentality sets in
Do more, full speed ahead
You'll find life is our life's work
I wish I had talked
You know what they say--watch out for the quiet ones
Spin this globe
You're going to the middle of nowhere
 

Reviews

[J.P.]

I really don't know what to say about this one. It's not great but it's not bad too. the poem intrigued me and it stated some blatant facts on life. It also acted as a warning sign for some, like "you're going to the middle of nowhere."
another plus for capitalizing the "SPIN..." Nice central attention.

Nevermind, I'll say it's a good one, a good free verse.
Interested in writing some rhymes?

[Here's What I Say]

"A gold-rush mentality sets in
Do more, full speed ahead
You'll find life is our life's work"

Story of this country's life, isn't it? We all ran for California to find gold, but it's 2009 and we found debt instead. That was random.

"I wish I had talked
You know what they say--watch out for the quiet ones"

Don't fear what they say; fear what they DON'T say.

"Spin this globe
You're going to the middle of nowhere"

Spin this globe...hmm. Interesting last line. My interpretation: go all around the world if you like, but it's not where you go; it's what you learn? Or how you change? All I really can put to words is that simply traveling doesn't guarantee change or personal growth. Take that one as you will.

[The Reticent Receptioni..]

I love this. a lot lot lot. Great work. :)

[Caleb Benton]

"Incredible doesn't have to be high to soar."

you had me at hello, good poem. good job.

[Timothy Starship]

"You'll find life is our life's work"


i concede victory

[Erin Was Here.]

I LOVE this poem.
It is so free. I love the formatting, and I love the words you used. I love the phrase "gold-rush mentality," and I love the title (that's what made me click on it, actually). I, like J.P. like the way you capitlized SPIN...it kind of gave the word a sense of adventure (I don't know why....and now that I think about it, that kind of sounds crazy...ah...I don't know what I'm talking about).
Anyways. I think this poem is beautiful. It's going in my library. :)