Life isn't a movie

Lonely thoughts of a lonely boy

I never thought that life was so stagnant

as I stand in this crowded train 

inertia sets me left to right

a million things running through my brain

And

There

You 

Were

Just standing across me with your headphones on

probably listening to one of your favorite songs

not a worry on your face

just humming that tune away

As 

They 

Push me

Around

All I  see is your hazel eyes

covered by your brunette hair

with a smile so radiant

that your cheekbones flare 

In 

A 

Different 

Place

I might be afraid

but your pretty face

would make me walk up to you anyway

with the courage to ask you out

Wish 

You

Looked

My way

So I could feel what its like

to connect with your eyes

I never believed, till today

in love at first sight

Only 

In 

Movies

Yeah?

This is goodbye for now

I've got to get off and live 

Wondering what if

You walked up to me 

And 

Planted 

A 

Kiss

Author's Note

Reviews

[s y e]

this was such a good write, Kee - I loved it, it was beautifully structured and worded. Can my life not be a movie, pleaseeeeee! Then I do have full control of it, I'll be the director, oh please.

p.s - loved it.

~ Noodle.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

hi Kee....
this is sweet...i like all that pondering of her...the conversation going on in his head...

and then the final moment when he gets off the train...wondering if she had done the same..and if she thought about kissing him...and next time, would she?

is there connection, or is he just seeing a movie in his mind...one not based on real life.

This Kee, is so romantic, and sweet, first I love how you catch moments, weather it's real or fiction, you have the possibility as a writer to combine, make create, "love" through your words, It was a wonderful daily snapshot, of how some equals can pass eachother on a regular day. The fate through your words brings me shivers, for we will never know what happens next, keep it that way, for it will be swirling for a long time in my mind after leaving this poem... just fantastic. :)

- Elisa

[Poussiere D'Ange]

Yeah it feels horrible when the person we have a crush on or the person we love does not lookour way. It's sad but the poem is sweet. It makes those feelings come alive. Really romantic one here Kee:-):-):-D.

[Carolann Dowsett]

This is really sweet and very relatable. Looking for love in a world that is blind to possibilities :)

[Wpww!!!]

Who's playing the peino there really good.

[Wpww!!!]

This is such a brilliant poem. How did you come up with it. Is it really based on someone you met.
Fm"prophet.

[Sseoni]

I really enjoyed reading this poem! It's very relatable and I thought the layout of the poem was unique and it was very well written. Great job!

[BL]

Keegan we are all on that train with you secretly harbouring these fantasies, thinking about 'that' girl and then you go and bandy them about without a second thought, so......

.....well done to you, well said that man :-)

So many missed chances

[KeeD]

plenty of rail tracks ahead of us, the journey is long, anything can happen on the way :)

[BL]

A good way of looking at it, I agree