Ronan

Dark matter covers my salty eyes 

Unearthing a disguise covered by emotion

The heart lingers beyond the velvet lies

Of the black hole that's set in motion

Feelings suppressed into the void

With a power to destroy infinite moon 

Asteroids of cunning now deployed

No corner of space stands immune

Your nebula in the midnight sky 

Gravitates towards an apology 

Ronan let me ask you why

you treat me like old technology

You create ripples in my universe 

A vortex of goodbyes, your departing curse

My arms tremble, my heart dispersed

Living without you, yet you exist in verse

Author's Note

Picture Credit goes to the artist sissorelle from deviant art

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

"A vortex of goodbyes this is your curse" what a great line! The celestial metaphor of a love gone off into the galaxy works beautifully here. When the one you love is gone, it does seem as though you are spinning through the great void. Great imagery. Lydi**

[KeeD]

What a great review, thank you Ms Lydia Shutter.

[Mirror]

Ah! you did change the whole work!! Wow, nice feel. this is good for academic purpose and pleasure reading. NIcccccccccccccce work!

[Mirror]

Mind if I turn this, Keegan? It will still maintain the originality, I promise.

"Emotion triggers your disguise
Heart lingers beyond the event horizon"

To

"Your disguise is triggered by your emotion
Heart lingers beyond the event horizon"

The Rhythms.

[KeeD]

Thanks to this review I changed the entire piece, let me know if you prefer these changes or not. Thank you and sorry for bothering you but your opinion inspires me.

[Mirror]

Who said you are bothering me? Tell me the person, and i will send Halley to him or her.... i can never get tired of reading your work.

[Gul]

First big thanks to Divya. I could get you through her. You are an amazing, magical and writer. Your chapters fell me in love with universe. The every bit of above poems made me feel alive and magical.

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your work. So alive and wonderful. You make the reader believe your needs and wants. Your words take the reader to new places and better thoughts. The goal of the writer. Thank you for sharing the amazing chapter.
Coyote

[Matching Socks]

Really neat poem.
Great idea putting these into a collection.
Interesting and unique comparisons.
Nice job!

[KeeD]

Thanks Ana for taking the time to check my work out.