Written in Veins

I found fossils in my blood

Of paper boats we used to set a free in the floods 

Those promised monsoon Junes

Now just memories written in veins

 

So what if the bottles rim bruises my lip

And the needles pinch excavates my skin

I want to basterdized my conscious state

So I can dream about everything I hate

  

Cheers for the feast of spiritual guidance 

And that tempting platter full of solutions 

Drown me out of my seclusion 

A pretty way of dealing with her not coming back

 

I read the passage written in veins 

About how the past is nothing but pain

I'd bleed a boat and escape to sea

To spend a future where you're with me

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Such intense emotion I feel when I read you Kee. Your lines are so imaginative and poetic, it is a joy to read you. This is a very beautiful poem.

Your friend

Chris

[KeeD]

Thank you for reading me Chris, you're really kind.

[Chris Shaw]

Have a good day.

[Rebecca J Martin]

Wow... So beautiful in a dark way... really had my mind wandering. I really enjoyed reading this part of your mind!

[KeeD]

Thank you for reading me and further dwelling in my mind and work Rebecca

[Rebecca J Martin]

you are very welcome :)

[¿]

Absolute hope lying found here...no matter if she's there in the future with you or not...you may proceed over there bleeding a boat escape the sea....if couldn't find her...may face the demise...cause no return to past is possible!!
Twas really great to read☺

[Ardra]

I felt this has same sentiments as my poem...cry me a river.... could feel the emotions...overflow from this one...

[barleygirl]

Your writing is amazing. This is some of the most original writing I’ve seen. Your metaphors are vivid & plentiful. I love the way you make utter hopelessness sound intriguing & even tempting. I can feel that urge to seek mindlessness, to fester in hateful feelings, etc. You craft those lines so well, it doesn’t even sound as desperate as it really can be. I like to honor all feelings, good & bad . . . you’ve done that here in great measure . . . it’s all part of being a damn fallible human (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a talented writer. Your words vivid and alive.
"I read the passage written in veins
About how the past is nothing but pain
I'd bleed a boat and escape to sea
To spend a future where you're with me"
The above lines. Deep and true. Thank you Keegan for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ms. barrie]

I believe this is one of my favorite s from u. Hard to choose tho'.
the opening lines...are stellar. Captivating write that's very poignant.
Remarkable meter, pleasing rhyme. I agree: an overall
Amazing write, indeed...Thank you for sharing (:

[Joel Armstrong]

I loved this one.long time since I've read something this good.loved the imagery.
A small typo though shouldn't it be to spend a future' when' you're with me.?
Overall an amazing write.

[KeeD]

Hey thanks bud, no I think I meant to spend a future "where" she is with me. It's not about the idea that she may be there in the future. It's not for sure that any given time in the future (when) she'll be there with me. I guess if that makes sense.

[Joel Armstrong]

Yah....
I got it.thanks for the clarification..my bad : 😁