Anchors Away

new shape poem --

Anchors Away

 

Lost

 At sea

in this constant purgatory

of lies

and

 deceit,

I search

 for the

 strength

 of                                             an

 anchor to take me out of this tide.

Grounded, the iron bars provide

 stability, hopeless waves crash

against me, trying feebly

to take me

out

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I have no words.....my voice is in my awe! Well done!

[James Hanna-Magill]

Dear Kelsey

Time for a return visit.

I shall keep this review brief (by my standards) and just make a few points.

1) Concrete poetry. Now if there is any piece with completely fits this style of writing, this is it. The words as displayed in the page enhance the meaning. Well you have a poem about an anchor where the words are shaped into an anchor! I have never seen anyone do it better than this!

2) Whilst forcing the structure, you still manage to retain many poetic values.

i You maintain a rhyming pattern in couplets - 'sea' 'purgatory' - tide' 'provide' - ' feebly' 'me'

ii There is a natural rhythm to the poem too.

3) You punctuate sometimes. I would go all the way and either punctuate throughout, which means putting at least a full stop after your last word 'out' or not punctuate at all. I would go for the former.

The meaning of the piece is clear and has a raw emotional impact, certainly on me. You feel your life is floating or an aspect of it, moved by the daily tides of life and you want something to hold you tight, an anchor in your life.

There is no point in my quoting back to you my favourite lines, as I would simply quote the whole poem back to you.

4) In overview, a highly structured and sophisticated poem with a raw edged and impactful meaning.

Bravo!

Your friend

James

[Nix]

A great change of pace and a very well done poem. You managed to keep everything flowing even with the anchor shape restricting the possibilities. GREAT job! Different is almost always good.... almost.... but this was very well done.

[Kelsey O'Connell]

Thank you for the read and nice review!
I'm glad you enjoyed the piece

[Blaise]

Nice work. Even with the consonance of sound.

[Kelsey O'Connell]

Thank you :)