Dusk II

after last night's setting sun

Eve’s bloom, tequila sun slide

to rustling sheets, sigh 

of thighs, the day’s terminus, 

denouement to tide’s lapping 

erasure of urgency --

comic opera 

of expectancy, life’s load 

being shucked from mind. 

Salt, jigger, and lime.   

Ken e Bujold

Reviews

[willweb]

Sounds like the perfect way to end a day to me. Everything about this is romantic and beautiful. A nicely rafted poetic cocktail my friend.

[W. Barrett Munn]

a really interesting separation of what are in essence prepositional phrases that lead to the fundament in the last line, a glorious bonfire of elisions.

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

I too was taken with your opening line. A glorious introduction Ken. Cocktails at sunset and afterwards, rustling sheets Way to end the day. Muchly enjoyed.

Chris

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I particularly loved this opening line
‘Eve’s bloom, tequila sun slide’

And the end verse here

of expectancy, life’s load
being shucked from mind.
Salt, jigger, and lime.

The middle verse is great as well leaves not much to ones Imagination !
I love the whole poem
That’s what I’m saying !

[Dave Brown]

Could it be a Margarita that has you relaxing at day's end
or can you tell that I don't drink
He wondered

[Ken e Bujold]

thanks for the great opening line to something ... It could be a Margarita :)

definitely let you know when i finish it ... the poem, not the Margarita LOL