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M.Kilani
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And I stopped trying
Stopped dying
Not much I seek
And less I speak
And now I’m leaving
And disbelieving
The facts I made
The souls I raid
The fire and flame
The guilt and shame
I swallow my pride
And step aside
For good things need time
And patient I lack
As a heart turns black
And a voice becomes mime
No longer I remember
The rain of November
And the drops of pain
Falling with rain
No longer I can wait
For a change in my fait
For sun to shine
And cast warmth on my spine
No longer I follow the light
That keeps me awake every night
No longer I can pray
For no words are left to say
Even if I write
My sorrows of tonight
I can’t find them a title, I write them none
Just another document, document one
And a back against a wall
I await for it to fall
And the mirror now I break
For reflection that seems fake
No heart left to tame
And empty is the frame
No black nor white
No war no fight
No pride no regret
Just a silhouette
And a print of a man
Who did all he can
No more I try
No more I die
For I’m already there
Or at least I were
© 2011 M.Kilani
Reviews
To be honest, I wasn't really feeling this at the beginning. But with each stanza, the thematic hook grew stronger, and by the time the poem came around full circle... I was once again convinced of your talent as a writer.
Posted 14 Years Ago
"And patient I lack".
It would be better if you replace patient with *patience*. Your choice of of-course.
Over all this poem was fine. Although you should be knowing the expectations from you are sky high. ;)
Posted 14 Years Ago
"And patient I lack".
It would be better if you replace patient with *patience*. Your choice of of-course.
Over all this poem was fine. Although you should be knowing the expectations from you are sky high. ;)
in the tenth verse third line.. is the "nor" out of place..? and in the eighth verst dod you mean "find a title" instead of "find I title" just wondering.. over all a gripping read..
Posted 14 Years Ago
in the tenth verse third line.. is the "nor" out of place..? and in the eighth verst dod you mean "find a title" instead of "find I title" just wondering.. over all a gripping read..
I love it! You have great flow.
Posted 14 Years Ago
I love it! You have great flow.
beautifully explained,nice efforts, read mine too " QUEST OF LIFE".
Posted 14 Years Ago
beautifully explained,nice efforts, read mine too " QUEST OF LIFE".
A good read to distract me from my boring class. Thanks for entertaining me during Flash Animation 1!!!
Posted 14 Years Ago
A good read to distract me from my boring class. Thanks for entertaining me during Flash Animation 1!!!
seems like a resolute piece of work
Posted 14 Years Ago
seems like a resolute piece of work
Great work here
Posted 14 Years Ago
Great work here
this is really good
Posted 14 Years Ago
this is really good
Wow. This was intense and dark. Powerful piece, nicely done. Great write!
Posted 14 Years Ago
Wow. This was intense and dark. Powerful piece, nicely done. Great write!
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Added on February 2, 2011
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