Our Fault.

Thunder reigns, claiming it's right.
Screams echoe through a forgotten
Land, silence follows like a
Quite that kills.

For thou cannot witness
Thy cannot understand.
Death reniews, life destroys.
Humanity's genocide.

If beauty shall prevail, it
Must follow death.
From the ashes of the fallen,
A new world shall rise.

As a darkness falls, the light
Will burn through this shroud
Of absence.
A dawn chorus erupts from nothing.

We bring the dark.
We bring the death.
We bring the problem,
That only we can solve.

If we are to prevail, to
Power through this end.
We must join our fires.
Our light must converge as one.

Reviews

[Rahul]

our fault, we daily make enough faults but we don;t remember but your this write enforces me to reminds my faults what i did in my past...but on the other hand your thoughts inspires me too to correct what we did or what i did by not to make again that faults in future.
lovely write...i'm seeming here speechless, i can't say you more about this write except my nice hug if you accept it.

[Firefly]

Thank you again and sure why not :)

[Rahul]

love you again and forsure why not :)
you left your nice reviews on mine way :)

[Saint No-One]

I like this poem conceptually, but it needs a little refining. Also, this poem is somewhat of a backslide as far as grammar and spelling mistakes which really muddy your meaning. However, the refrain of we is powerful and the last stanza is a right hook to the temple. It left me jaw-dropped. Edit the first 4 stanza and edit for grammatical errors and this could be a gem.

[Firefly]

Thank you, and i shall edit it when i have the chance :)

[InsanityWriter]

"A dawn chorus erupts from nothing." Favorite line. ;) Amazing work. ^_^ Keep writing!!

[Firefly]

Thank you!! It means a lot :D

[DarkRainbowPie]

I get the impression that this is about war, how we kill each other for petty reasons, getting nothing from it but slow destruction to life and the planet itself. Also, global warming, pollution; how we're slowly killing the planet we live on. You have this written in a way that the reader is smacked with the sense of importance of the issue your discussing, but can apply a variety of subject matters to your work. Very well written, seriously.

[Firefly]

It is about how we destroy what we build simply my continuing to build. And thank you :)