A Coward in Love

Whimsical

He sat yonder,
On lush green meadows
So still, unmoving, a part of the horizon
Reminiscing his ever confound past,
Filled with the cataclysm called Love.

A single girl, he ever loved,
A friendly soul, a dreamy smile
Kindled the fire in his heart she did,
Ever so slightly, ever so fortuitous
For he had fallen in love.

Yearned for her, he did.
Cowardice, his companion,
Confess to her; he never could
Satisfied by watching her, he thought he would.
Yet ignorant, of the impending storm.

He watched one day,
With teary eyes, and a broken heart ,
An unknown man, a familiar girl; walk past him
Arms linked, enjoying the other's company.
Heart broken he was, but could only realize his own folly,

For this was the fate that awaited a coward in love.

Author's Note

A whimsical poem about the fate that awaits a coward in love. Reviews are much appreciated. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

This was a poem that I could sense, but not feel. If that makes any sense! I understood where you were coming from and I could definitely look through your eyes at the situation. There was a perspective I never considered being something that could be made palpable - to be made into words. I like the fact that you wrote from your perspective and then unintentionally about the feelings of heartbreak. I've read, and have written, poetry that laments the feelings of heartbreak - the feelings of betrayal, pain, anguish - but, I can't recall a poem that focused on how the writer viewed the scenario. Often, the poem would be written about the feelings within the scenario. Good work.

[KingDavid]

Thanks for your opinion @BThomvanWart

[Anindita Janhabee]

Very good words describing the striking emotion as well as the depth... Too fascinating and realistic...

[KingDavid]

Thank you for your opinion! ^_^

[unfathomd]

;) u cud hv used simple language well..that was a compliment u hv d depth :) keep picturin and paintin ur scene wit words :)

[KingDavid]

Maranamas? I dont get you. I tried simple language, but they didnt flow too well with me. I delibrately used their synonyms this time

[KingDavid]

Ah. You fiend. You edited the maranamas part away. Now I look like a fool

[unfathomd]

;) delete urs too see? That's done ;)

[KingDavid]

Haha. What a plan! :3