The Fog

Contusions have quite a thrill , especially when they paint my throat
clouding music,
I'm just a fulcrum away from climbing to pain

it's almost SyFy,
this love speaks fiction
i know it sounds cheesy, but at least these mental interludes will go unnoticed

i crawled to talking walls, the wood floors bring me fairytales,
"silly girl, you brought this on yourself."
His apologies scream in my ear,


the Fog , haha, you're too sweet, even sweeter when the cranium meets a pale jaw

lovely candy bricks, the contusions I still face, i guess I'm used to it.
the most pathetic morsel  in my life, a severed man begging for mercy.

Author's Note

All of my poetry is original and copyrighted.

Reviews

[MichaelsLyric.com]

This is an intricate piece. This piece ties imagery that doesn't go together, usually. This talks, I think, about a relationship, but it's hidden in this, either a light horror story, or dark science fiction. Great job with this one. Thank you for your creativity.

[Einstein Noodle]

courage weds stupidity in abusive relationships .. lots and lots between your lines ... makes me want to rescue :{ your "edge" is loud, clear and as sharp as ever!
E.

[Kleio13]

Thank you E

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ............ Hi Kleio!!! so nice to know you are here!

[Kleio13]

I missed you E!!!!

[kublakhan27]

Well, I needed a mental interlude to process the sheer rawness of this piece. You are a fearless storyteller my dear, which is great. Another hard-hitting and intense piece that resonates after the read :)

[magenta24uk]

great work. Like the candy bricks idea. relationships. pain. truth. beautiful. x

[Hailey Shay]

Very intricate and metaphorical. I like this a lot!! Great work on modern day expression of poetry, very well done. Props!

[crystalandra]

Nice piece, it moved me and in a way speaks of a relationship gone bad...Excellent imagery and choice of words--well done, thank you for allowing me to read your poem which I find outstanding!

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

it's almost SyFy,
this love speaks fiction -- I love these lines...in reading, I found myself smiling and nodding my head.

Another piece that I think really comes to life when read aloud. You have a talent for creating pieces that have a certain beat and flow that begs to be read. The darkness and grit that you paint with your images are quietly juxtaposed with the power and strength of your words. Nicely done.