Me is

Me is an evil that I cannot control 

Always seeking fulfillment  

From objects that cannot fulfill the soul 

Me is a villain that always brings pain 

Searching for an idol 

Inside evil's domain 

Me is a venom that is hurting those who lie near 

Breaking bonds 

And hoping that God can take away the endless fear 

Reviews

[zaneybear]

such a strong point got across in such a small amount of words, I enjoyed:)

[LightforChrist]

What a wonderful message in only three short stanzas! Great job! :)

[L.M.Warde]

I love the exposure of the being beneath the skin; how you describe the weakness of man, materialism, misery, misguided desires. Really well done!

[Clara]

We are all sinners indeed!

[Perkele.7885]

Me is knowing that the answer lies near! Perhaps on your bedside table or most certainly in almost any motel bedside drawer in America. Or, simply raising one's face to heaven and letting it all go that needs to be set free.
A great poem for soul searchers everywhere to contemplate on.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to not desire the wild side. Difficult to be kind and tender. I like the direct and honest feel in the poem. The poem open the door to thoughts to ponder. Old age had taught me. Better to be the gentle voice and leave the bad things hidden away. A strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sam]

Nice... I love the way you give Me an identity of its own. You show it is evil, seek fulfillment, a villain that always bring pain, a venom that is hurting those who lie near.
Breaking bonds.....
Powerful topic and one that people rarely see that ME is killing the soul and crushing all that is good. Me is something to run from. Thank you for embracing this topic enough to pen it down. More people should be informed. Wonderful read and a powerful write.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I really like this, Mike.. I like Me as a metaphor.. evil, villain, venom.. and then you describe how Me is all those things. Seems there is no redemption for Me, even though God is brought into the last line. There is hope though, so that could set one's mind at ease. I think you should write Me in all caps ME.. almost distancing the ME from the I. And have the title as just ME. I wonder why the distancing though. Why not say "I am" instead of "Me"? Just curious. I like the imagery of this poem. Good job, Mike!

[Mike Cole]

Thanks very much I am trying to put my writing based on more about who God is and how even though man is evil we can find comfort in the fact that God is good

[Ravyne Hawke]

Ok.. that makes since then since God is know as "I AM" I can see why the distancing with the "Me"

[Ravyne Hawke]

sense.. not since.. getting sleepy and the first thing to go is proper language.. lol