Still Is What I Cannot Be

Lol It's kinda creepy and I'm not quite sure where it came from.. but check it out anyway and if you like it review it :)

I’m just as fucked up as they say.
Dreams so real they make God pray.
Feet don’t fail me now, I’ll never stay.
I found an entrance to escape into the day.

Shattering a strangers mangled scream.
Spinning around in an endless dancing beam.
I cry into the night; tragic loveless theme.
My life a deepened purple color scheme.

Monsters suck away every bruising fear.
Until I see the world, this perpetual sphere.
Clawing frozen ice from my eyes to peer
As you, my zeal, crimson blood you smear.

Reviews

[Crazy Cat Man]

the first 2 lines were definately creepy

I’m just as fucked up as they say.
Dreams so real they make God pray.

wow even u make god pray lol good line

this was a fun dark poem. i am fan of things like this. good job :D now i sleep with a night light

[Dr. Wood ?]

loved the second line especially, but thought it should read THEY'D make God pay...Very dark and brooding..Bet it came out in a rush..it reads pretty fast

[That_Guy]

very dark but very interesting as well

[Kohleen]

Thanx :) haha it sorta just poped into my head today

[That_Guy]

ok well now I'm just scared... heh jk

[Kohleen]

ha, no worries. I don't bite. too hard.
lol jk. I'm not as demonic as this poem might hint

[That_Guy]

well I'll stay on my toes but trust you for now ;)

[Kohleen]

haha good choice :)