The loved & the estranged

The loved & the estranged

o romeo,

my soul longs to romance thine

my fingers with thine entwined

our eyes shalt be locked forever

the time we begin our journey together 

o romeo,

thou hast disappeared like a new moon

thy disappearance hath put me in gloom

a little too longer dragged-on phase

before i see thy bright moon-like face 

o jijoe,

Thy eyes speak of broken promises, broken trust

for all thou hath wanted was thrust for thy lust

but as i owe to keep promises made unto thee

until i do so, i couldn't privilege of being as free

o jijoe,

the loser that i am as i fell for thee; i fell in life

when thy eyes conveyed of rosy thorns & knife 

so now if ye stab me from the front, i won't rebel

but to take away thy pain i dare even go to hell

Author's Note

Thanks.

Reviews

[Acropolix]

Firstly, the third line of the very first stanza states 'for forever', I believe this should be 'forever'. In the second stanza you write 'disapperance', as I'm not sure whether this should be Old English or not, it might possibly be 'disappearance'.
Now for the praise! The imagery is very romantic and your use of Old English is very well applied. Certainly well done!

[Kruppz]

i typed in a haste and got it wrong. You're right it's "disappearance"

[Dayran]

The bird that flies in the air doesn't leave a line in the sky - Zen

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Use of old english give this an extra edge :)

[Kruppz]

Thanks. Wrote after so long.