All the stars are gone

All the stars are gone

Side by side
Looking ahead
You hold my hand
But avoid my gaze

Hip to hip
Your laughter echoes in the silence
A feeble attempt to blur your visage
With empty words to keep me spellbound

I dispel the dissonance and speak,
If my existence is no more than the
Tick
Of your watch, then
Release my hand
 

You remain silent.

As I start to lessen my grip,
I feel yours tighten, and I stop
And for the first time you look at me directly.
In that instant,  I am brought to my knees
Startled by the sudden impact.

The promise is made.
 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A sweet and beautiful moment and poem. A pleasure to read. Best days in a life when someone weaken your knees.
Coyote

[Pepsimax]

I could read this numerous times. The vocabulary was excellent and it was unique in it's writing style. I love some of the phases and especially the last one :

' As I start to lessen my grip,
I feel yours tighten, and I stop
And for the first time you look at me directly.
In that instant, I am brought to my knees
Startled by the sudden impact.'


10/10

[Keira]

I really enjoy this, quite beautiful in it's simplistic elloquence. I enjoy the line breaking, a fan myself of using them in a way you have. I enjoy some of your phrases as well, my favorite being "I dispel the dissonance". Lovely work =)