The Tall Man

Ever get that feeling you're being watched?

From the corners of any room

It lingers about

Slithering from the shadows

When the lights go out

Over your body it looms

 Staring into your dreams

As silent as it is still

Feasting on muffled screams

Lanky and thin

And curious as well

It departs as it arrived

Into the shadows it melts

If the Tall Man stops in

For a meal or for a scare

You will never wake up

And never know he was there

Author's Note

Review and rat this for me. If you review, please be specific. Tell me what you liked and didn't like about it. Did it scare you, make you feel uneasy? Be specific.

Thanks, Kyle~

Reviews

[writer in trial]

Man you scare me :D
I love this line
"It departs as it arrived
Into the shadows it melts"
I feel this creature as something reptile kinda. smooth, fast and curvy movements and that imagination scare me the most. :D
This is interesting. I loved it. I imagined this creature rolling over my body :D

[Kyle J. Lawson]

I was thinking more of a dark, slim shadowy humanoid like black mass.

[writer in trial]

my creature is slim and tall with movements like reptile who quickly vanish before you see. At the time of vanish, his shadow will quickly merge to become a single point. :D. Don't know what i'm writing :D

[Kyle J. Lawson]

Sounds similar to mine. :) Great minds think alike.

[writer in trial]

Yeah :D
tc :)
And keep posting. I think your stories can be directed for Supernatural 2 :D

[writer in trial]

Yeah :D

[Kyle J. Lawson]

They're highly based on the supernatural. It's one of the things I know best.

[Matt]

Very nice. The pacing and rhyme of this is tight, clean, and almost playful while being dark and ominous. Made me think a bit of Shel Silverstein.
The last stanza is very good, it delivers just what the creature is.

Good one.

[Kyle J. Lawson]

Hey thanks. I'm glad you could see exactly what I was going for.

[Matt]

You're welcome.