I am locked out of my Happy Place

I am locked out of my Happy Place

A by kym820

There were times when I could just go to my happy place and forget about everything.
Now it seems that someone has changed the locks on my happy place and I can't get inside.
When someone squats in your happy place and changes the locks, what do you do?

© 2009 kym820


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I like the title and the idea. I do feel, as short as it is, you could lose half of it. No need to repeat 'my happy place' three times and 'changes the locks' twice. Less is more.

Perhaps something like:

"There were times when I could go to my happy place and forget about everything.
Now it seems that someone has changed the locks. When bars you out and takes over, what do you do?"

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I like the title and the idea. I do feel, as short as it is, you could lose half of it. No need to repeat 'my happy place' three times and 'changes the locks' twice. Less is more.

Perhaps something like:

"There were times when I could go to my happy place and forget about everything.
Now it seems that someone has changed the locks. When bars you out and takes over, what do you do?"

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Philadelphia, PA



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