Im scared

im scared becuase...

 

i dont want anyone else to have your heart

i dont want anyone else to kiss your lips

i dont want anyone else to be the one you love

i dont want anyone else to be your forever

i dont want anyone to take my place 

Reviews

[Kaelyn Shea]

thanx the person i wrote it for thought i was beinbg wierd cuz i worried about this stuff

[zack]

its not my kind of poem but it is real good

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i love this.. thats how i feel for someone right this instant...

[Anna Kay]

i love this! its going into my libray!

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

Remember to always fix grammatical errors in your poems as it really does make that much of a difference: "I'm" scared because(semi-colon) // "I" don(apostrophe)t want anyone else to have your heart(comma) // "I" don(apostrophe)t want anyone else (add 'other than me' after else, every time) to kiss your lips(comma) // "I" don(apostrophe)t want anyone else to be the one you love(comma) // "I" don(apostrophe)t wany anyone else to be (add with) you (change your to you) forever(comma) // "I" don(apostrophe)t want anyone (add else) to take my place(period)

A very well written poem exercising a fairly common, but not often written about, fear that we as lovers have. We give out the trust to others that they won't break our hearts, because we want to be their "everlong." Very well expressed, nice prose, good rhythm, just work on grammatical errors. Keep up writing! 'love ya!

A Friend and a Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

[Kaelyn Shea]

:) you always make me smile

[Glenn Davis]

yep :)

[Kaelyn Shea]

you promise?

[Glenn Davis]

hmmmm....... you should change it to:

I am happy because...

No one else will.....