The Undoing

Tremulous fingers uncertain

a momentary hesitation

a steeling breath in

silken straps

g  l  i  d  e

off delicate

sunkissed shoulders

The shift, like his eyes, travel

d

o

w

n

w

a

r

d

 

puddle

a gossamer pool

at her high-heeled feet

He licks his lips in anticipation

hungry for the taste of her

She smiles shyly,

ever the coquette

all innocence and pink -tinged flesh

now led away to temptation.

He silently wonders at her ability

to make him so hard

she smiles knowingly.

Why do they always

make it so damn easy?

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Aidz]

swirl in the myriad of sequential pleasures with an eloquent tongue masterful in the ways of innocent flesh.... drink drink ,,,,

Ohh can others read this s**t yeah nice write umm kewl use of eloquent vowels cojoined in adjective ... Oh who am I kidding

[LA Lorena]

you never need to censor yourself on my account!

[Jibey]

Lovely poem... cleverly constructed and leading us downwards so nicely.. the image of the 'gossamer pool' was original and provocative (I thought she had squirted too quickly for a moment lol) ... and I sensed the triumph of the femme fatale as she calculated the impact of her allure...

Liked it a lot... wonders at your ability... :-)

[Forest Green]

Consequential temptations; two lost within each other. Very uniquely erotic poem with a layout to match. From smiling shyly to confidence in the ultimate outcome the lady wins hands down...

Daniel

[Linear]

Easy moves the seductress and into her spell we men fell, easy meat like little sheep led to slaughter when all he wanted was to date her daughter....enjoyed :0)

[Mark]

Gosh-a-Mercy! Nothin' shy about that girl, izzit??
Yeah, gotta love that lip-licking...

[SpokenWord]

ROFL.. oh this is going in my favorites I love the main character in this poem, heart be still! It is nothing better in life than a woman who knows her sexual power over a man and who knows how to use it with confidence. Of course I got stuck down at her feet and heels she had me there so I guess I am just more easier than most but then again I am slave they say :) Oh but anyway, I love the sexy and powerful flow of this one, you hit this one hard because it hit me twice as hard and it was unexpected. This poem is just sexy as they come!

Write more of this please!! LOL Lord I love this poem!

[writing mojo]

HA HA the lioness is at prowling speeds in this piece...then drinks from the imagery sweet... good stuff

[OT]

hahaha the chase - brilliantly descriptive - and love the construction - nice!

[.]

LOL..we all love the chase..that's why bad men are so attractive!

[Orlando Murcia]

Excellent write

Loved the style and your creativity

along side it


Awesome!!


Orlando M

[FJ Davis]

It's this kind of female conspiracy that a man can well live with!
There isn't anyone anywhere any better at eliciting erotic emotion than the fabulous LA Lorena.
Just that simple.