A change~

Roses are red, Violets are blue, I'm sick of this poem, how 'bout you? Lets try again for a change of heart, why don't we go for a different start?....

Roses are red, violets are blue;

I'm getting sick of this poem, how 'bout you?

Let's try again for a change of heart,

why don't we go for a different start?

 

Roses are red, blood is too,

the violets, like your eyes, are icy blue.

Sugar is sweet; lemons are sour,

you're as tempting as a unpicked flower.

Your grinning face, which hides the charade,

is as deciving as a bright, sunny day.

Drop the mask; I know who you are,

this little game won't get you far.

Your gnarled grin tells me I'm right,

 as plain and open as a lit-up neon light.

You against me, one on one,

like a king against a pawn.

Who will win? Let's wait and see,

for now, It's just you and me.

 

 

Author's Note

The poem "Roses are red," is such a cliche' - thought I'd change it up a bit. No, this has nothing to do with me, but it ryhms. My first thing put on here, so bear with me, plz~

Reviews

[Alex Thomas]

Very easily related to. Interesting start. I love the play on the cliche. "like a lit up neon light" is a bit out of rhythm. You might need to add something to it to make it flow better.

[R E Tree]

I like the conversational tone in this. It makes the reader feel welcome to who you are. It makes people not afraid to met you. I adore that line "the violets, like your eyes, are icy blue" I know someone who has icy blue eyes and I enjoy looking deep into them. Great job

[SimplyDisastrous]

The rhyming scheme in this is remarkable! How'd you know I liked poems that rhymed? xD And this is really funny.

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[Rachel 6sixtrümper]

This was great, loved the humor in it. And is that L Lawliet in your avatar? lmfao

[*Evelen*]

This was amazing! I really liked how you changed it. The imagery was great. Well done. Adding as favorite. Thanks for sharing:)