Smile

My first Seynru poem

Smile

smiling old woman

colourful wet clothes hanging

wind blows sandy dirt

Author's Note

Hi there,
If you read any of my work I would appreciate a review. Constructive critics are always welcome. I always leave reviews for everything I read.

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A mesmerizing haiku. One that speaks of life in such a simple action. It brings back a lot of memories to my mind. Especially watching my grandmother hanging wet clothes out to dry back in the late 60's and early 70's. It is a simple moment that leaves a lifetime impression upon the heart. Excellent work on these words.

[Lisasview]

hi carlos long time no see... typing with my left finger because i broke my clavicle bone...
anyway, this is not a haiku..it is a senyru poem.. first i have ever written.. i am so happy that it brought back happy memories...
lisa, trying to deal with the pain

[Neville]

I bet no one who visits this page can leave it without the smile it caused to remain on their face .. Neville just about to hop into a late shower

[Lisasview]

Such a kind review Neville
Thank you

[1809 Black Plague Decem..]

Good evening, Lisa View,
This is a nice poem.
I like the touch of the picture with your poem.
----1809 Black Plague December

[Lisasview]

I always love adding the perfect image to my poems..glad you liked it.
Lisa, now in Spain

[1809 Black Plague December]

you are most welcome, honey,

[Cherrie]

You always have to wonder old women are smiling about.
Excellent Senru

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness Cherrie
I was just trying out this form and accidentally posted it!!?
I need to make sure it okay before posting it
Lisa

[Lisasview]

I reposted it..

[Cherrie]

You have all the elements.
Plus it is beautifully layered. Each line so very simple but visually appealing creating a story. I loved it.