Retrospection

Rest In Peace Padr� <3

A gentlemen`s drag,
The past is here.
Bitter taste,
It feels sincere.

Bright lights,
On the steeple.
Forgetting education,
Please help your people.

Grey clouds,
Over sunny skies.
I felt fear and sadness,
At your closed eyes.

The back wall occupant,
Before the pale yellow light.
Carpet lines enthrall me,
On this, an auspicious night.

I hope to change,
The pattern soon.
It tells me "remember"
It means the moon.

I wish I could share,
This second with him.
I remember you here,
My friend, dear Ben.

Reviews

[Sorry Infamous]

This was simply a great dedication.

[hey]

so solid, stoic. makes a point, and you have great diction. you chose just the right words for this, its gorgeous. I'm in love with the fourth stanza. Great job!

[DiggeyEleven]

It was a simple piece with beautiful flow, great imagery and a great conclusion to exactly what you were feeling.

[Wunderlich]

Wow, really nice job here. The last stanza is an excellent way to end it. Great job.

[Chrissy]

outstanding poetry here!
i reallly liked it!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i cant say much more than what previus people have said about this pease,
i really injoyed reading this!

[Song of Mercy]

Jon you did an outstanding job of tying your imagery to specific ideas. You also added metaphores that were understandable and highlighted the imagery. I did not understand every word...COOL. This is plain as day layered with depth for the seeker. Great Job...Song

[Meredith Leigh]

Oh Jon! This was so pretty. I wish my vocabulary was as good as yours! How dare you not call yourself a poet silly! Enough of that now. This was beautiful, and I'm pretty much crying right now omg. Ben would have loved it of course

[Aekmy]

Aww. I am so very sorry for your loss. This displays the sadness of losing someone perfectly. :)

Keep on writing my friend.