My Life

The perils of addiction.

My Life

 

So much sorrow, sadness, pain and shame

No one but myself to blame.

I had a choice, I chose to go bad

Thought a good time would be had.

Lost control, got in too deep

Told people who cared to take a leap.

I got this, nothing wrong with me

Far too late I began to see.

I had it all; house, car and wife

Seemed to be the perfect life.

I was so wrong, screwed it all up

For what?  The contents of a cup

A cup of beer, full of cheer

What was there to fear?

Found out fast, found out hard

Jail and rehab, what a tard!

Got it together, got it straight

Today my life's pretty darn great.

Keep it real family and friends

We never know how it ends.

 

Author's Note

This is my first attempt at poetry. Any comments would be most helpful and greatly appreciated. Thank you!

Reviews

[quinfinn]

the honesty in this piece is the most impressive thing about it. you have some rhyme and meter skills which are quite impressive as well. perhaps you have found an outlet for your emotions which is better suited to your new and improved lifestyle. i encourage all new writers to write, continue writing, embrace your muse..find your style and always . always, let your pen wander free and allow your mind to catch up afterward. welcome to writerscafe. you will find many friends here if you care to embrace their writings as well...good job!

[Lancerj]

Thank you so very much!

[quinfinn]

you're welcome! just have fun

[Debra Wedin]

I love every word you said quinfinn! :-)

[quinfinn]

thank you, i try to encourage new writers to relax and enjoy the process.

[Angi]

Listen to this guy. I was a newbie not so long ago and he welcomed me with open arms. His writing is pretty good, too! PS~Hi Quin!

[icelandicblue]

I hope your story of loss and success can help someone else who is struggling. Thank you so much for sharing your story.

[Lancerj]

Your welcome!

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a great piece, for many reasons. The rhyme and rhythm work well, and most important, you wrote honestly and from the gut. That's what writing is for, my friend! Nicely done!

[Lancerj]

Thank you Rita! I appreciate that!

[Angi]

I think opening yourself up and really letting the pen take over is the first step of good poetry. This writing is good because it made me feel something. It read well. I always just let my pen go and hopefully I can make sense of it. Form and rhyme are something fun to switch up. Good for your first piece!

[Lancerj]

Thank you Angi! Much appreciated!

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is really good for your first attempt at writing poetry. You have a good grasp of rhyming, staying within a pattern of aabbccdd. I like it when I can follow someone's rhyming scheme and have it make sense to me. You have written a good moral lesson for others here and it is great that this ended so positively. Well done!

[Lancerj]

Thank you Lori! I look forward to reading your works!

[Ravyne Hawke]

Feel free to stop by any time. add me as a friend if you'd like. Then we can exchange read requests often.

[Debra Wedin]

I love this, the raw and honesty of it!!
Very, very well written my friend ;-)

[Lancerj]

Thanks Deb!

[Debra Wedin]

Your welcome