Morning Whispers

She softly whispers to her love

Who lay beside her in the bed

"I love to watch you sleep my prince"

As she gently kissed his head

"I love the way you always smile,

Before that little white lie"

"You knew you couldn't fool me

But it was fun to watch you try"

"I love to watch you try to dance

Though rhythm, you have none"

"I couldn't bear to break your heart

'Cause you were having so much fun"

"I love the Father that you became

The kids were your pride and joy"

"You were the happiest man in the world

With your little girl and boy"

She softly whispers to her love

As she slowly starts to weep

The coroner comes to take him away

For he died last night in his sleep

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Awww. That was a poetic punch to the soft underparts. Its a wonderful - sad poem.

[ChaoticSoul]

Wow, what a punch at the end. The emotion in this is conveyed really well. You captured a really gentle and human moment with raw intensity. Very nice writing.

[......]

oh wow, sad write, so well written and expressed.

[eglantine]

"As she gently *kissed his head" simple tense fix.

Aw, this is sad and the diction def works in this poem.