Crawled into Bed

A poem about a great day out that ended on a bad note.

My hopes soared,

My brother, ever so close

I rode away, with haste

For time pressed,

We pushed on

For a thrill here

A fill there

I saw the lights

The people, the places,

An intervention by nature,

A ride home

Mom and Dad

Well and Well, 

Then we returned......

He left me,

I could fell it

Like a blade,

Straight through my heart

I ate the food he left me,

Drank my watered down coke cola,

Crawled into bed,

And cried myself to sleep......

Author's Note

I expressed a lot of emotion here, in two different styles to separate them.

Reviews

[Richard Anthony Goulart]

Wow straight through the heart is what your poem did to me. It was stunningly full of emotion.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we can know joy and pain in the same second. I could feel the sadness for the leaving of the brother. I like the ending. Made the poem feel real with the food and drink left by the brother. A very good poem.
Coyote

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Very sad indeed. Your styles were used well for the emotions being expressed. Well done!