I Love You!

An experiment in shape poetry...

I love you!      I love you!

I love the way you make me smile

I love the way you make me laugh

I love the way you make me feel

Wait, you’re leaving me?

Because loving you

Shouldn't be

About

Me?

Author's Note

Let me know what you think!

Reviews

[RAOrourke]

Like the heart and poem had nice pacing and truth behind it

[Ayushi]

Haha .. lovely and amusing at the same time :)

[Kamari's]

Its kind of sad that the person left because the other expressed how they felt but it was towards them

[C. Rose]

Congratulations on being in the top ten of the first "Promote Me!" contest.
Your poem is a witty reflection on love.
Voting closes in a week.
I invite you to join the group "Promote Me!". Your piece will be accepted into the library, and should you win it will be featured.

[Jack Kennedy]

Ha perfectly done and I definitely like the structure of how you perfectly shaped it into a heart!

[DaughterNature]

Hahaha, that's very cute! I don't have much to say because shape poetry is usually more about the shape, but I do think that the 5th line ("Wait...") could be worded differently, although it is fine as is.

[Melissa S]

HAHA. The ending was fantastic. Add that to the clever layout, and you get a marvelous piece. Sometimes shorter poems say it the best, and I believe this is one of them.
It carries a great message about love and relationships as well. :)

[jjwilbourne]

Haha. This was clever.
Took a pretty dramatic turn.

[Ambra Celeste]

Cleverly written using the rights words to create a heart shape. I liked the ending because it was totally unexpected.

[Rick r]

Hi, Lawrence.
Well...what do you think? I've read a few of your poems, and liked all of them. This one, I like the effort you put into the heart thing. I do like poems about unrequited love. Have written a few meself. Having read you before, I'm wondering if you might be pulling my leg with this one. :)
Rick