Your Ceiling

....laying in bed....

I feel the trace of my tears
Tickling the back of my neck
Just below the hollows of my ears

Author's Note

...even dry, I will always feel them...

Reviews

[Scarlet Pulse]

Your title is captivating and a three line poem is very interesting too. You have a good sense of form from what I see with syllables. And your end rhymes are great. I think you can do a lot with those three lines and keep the form and end rhymes. Good job!

[Ed Hart]

wait until you've wept an ocean...

[Subjective Sanity]

A feeling I know all too well. You captured it perfectly!

[xXx]

i believe you have captured "sensation" ... and put it on display

[Gandré]

.. into a cavern, deep ad wide..
Isn't everything an association? I liked this!

[Ms. Gruye]

delightful:
i dare not make critique longer than your piece.

[Emily B]

not crazy dejavu at all . . . wonderfully written

[Gandré]

full of experience and good sense of one's self.