~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

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Awesome poem!!!
I love the wording in this poem!

Me Being Me,
Morgan P.

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This poem speaks volumes to me and I can completely relate to the concept you convey. The format is amazing . . . I don't think I've ever read a poem that has been written so cleverly, such as this.

Truthfully sad, yet a very brave write.

[Emily Rose]

This is quite interesting; the ever-changing rhyme scheme and all the different elements that compose the poem make interesting to read, but I think you do overdo it a little bit. There are times where the changing of color, rhythm and style makes the poem seem a bit schizophrenic, as if it's trying to contradict itself. While it's visually pleasing, it might not be the best idea to sacrifice meaning and clarity to the form of the poem. Also, I was very confused by your use of single quotation marks and ellipses. You might want to cut back on those a little :-) Otherwise, this poem raises some very good, well-founded questions about the nature of love.

[Janice Ann]

Oh my GOSH I love this! I absolutely love it, I love the passion, the format LOVE IT ALL!
Janice Ann

[Ray Hamilton]

"SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?"
I believe in "True Love" but sometimes unfortunately it is one sided, masked in lies and hurt.
True Love I believe never dies BUT you can't hold someone that wants to run.
One must let go and move on, as hard as that is, believe me I know.
Thanks for the write Ray { Not a Poet and I know it }

[Poetic82]

After 20 years of marriage I can tell you, time has shown, you fall in love and out of love numerous times a year. We were born into this place alone, even twins, triplets, quads etc... they leave the canal alone. So living with someone is an experience for all of us. The key is figuring out how to bob when they weave and weave when they bop so we all stay in tune and remain in the dance. Yes love can be eternal as long as you don't focus on the externals. Great write....

[CharlieO]

I really enjoyed this write - it is so unique and well written - totally different from a lot of the poems to be found on this site.
I liked the way you have formatted this piece - I like the interplay between the John Doe speech and the more traditional poetic form. There was reality in what the John's Doe characters were staying - the ups and down, emotions and thoughts assoicated with a long term commitment to someone. The parts in red so the drama involved in a relationship - as they capture the emotion.
Congrats on a great write - one of the best poems I have read on this site.

[Mav]

I really enjoyed reading this. The format as far as I know is original. I have not seen one like it. The exploration of love, from first meeting to an almost hatred was very true to life. Does true love ever die is a question to which we may never know the answer. Very well done.

[ShanZ-Turn]

I loved this. I thought the addition of the dialogue, and how it changes over time was amzing, a wonderful way to"add"something more to a piece...

[April]

The moment i started reading it sounded a lot like the "True Love" everyone has gone through, the kind of "love" that happens every single day and it just repeats from person to person and no one seems to learn from everyone elses mistakes and i love how it told a story as well to bring it to life in my head its a good read :]