~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Chillbear Latrigue]

This poem is really clever and excellent. Two things bothered me. I don't know how I feel about your choice of font. Maybe play around with that a bit. Also I think you use quotation marks around small words too liberally. I get what you are trying to do, but I also feel like I am being beaten over the head by the points. The positives are abundant. I loved the conversations between the Does.

[Ms. MoneyPenny]

You have inspired me to get back here and start writing again! I love the form of this whole piece and the way you were able to write both for the speaker and the side conversation of Jane and John Doe.....I too like the red letters because it drew me to the meaning of it all as i followed the Doe's through their love journey.....Kudos to you!!!

[autumnsky]

This so so beautiful, real and deep. I had to read it thru it like 4 times to absorb it's depth. Your portrayl of g the consversational dialogue really added to this piece.. I will need to read this a few more times to completely get it all.

[Astrid Hamilton]

Legacy you are!
I have never seen a poem in this type of format. You have definitely touched your feminine side in presentation. It is very unique and creative! Did I ever say I am 'proud' of you?
(I don't mean that in any condescending way)
This poem emulates love, yet dismay;
How curious to vex your readers on their own (warped) reality of true love;
But I myself believe in it; a gift from God above;
and if pursued correctly,
a gentleman knocking on the door, never to implore those sights and smells too quick before
the other eyes have had a chance to also know the other,
then in time and fate,
can be realized, TRUE LOVE like no other-
(if all the elements are there):
FaITh, HopE, unrelentless care;
looking through the mirrorglass beyond, remember Humans all at some time err,
not a one is perfect, but this certain love, gentle, fair,
can be recalled someday in a time with only tears
if left uncared for, abandoned, admonished,
the sun will wither and never repair-
and the search, oh, it could go on forever, forever to the brink of time,
and never be found, and then only realized,
lost in its only time.

[Rose]

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray
Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'
Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever�
To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

That line REALLY hit home with me because of an event that is happening tomorrow. It is supposed to rain tomorrow, like I knew it would. I am dancing in the rain. I might run in to my very first true love. But it will not be pretty if I do. But I have to see her. But I know I will regret it, because it will only cause me more pain.

Especially about the 'rhythm of dance' . . . we met at a dance class. I could go on, too, but I think you get the point. I really like this. I think the poem in red could easily stand on its own, though I like the multiple thought patterns at the same time.

[A.j. Dru]

interesting. creative format. nice word choice. I like the alternation between the male and female counterparts. I think it is deep and has a lot of passion behind it, but it's really not my cup of tea. I can't judge based on personal preference, so my objective opinion is that it's a really creative piece but I'd like to see more use of other poetic devices along with the creative format that you have here. Keep at it.

[tina edwards]

You did an excellent job and in my opinion no true love never dies

[rash]

unparalleled. unique. interesting. but difficult to follow. I love the mixed-media way of it. That is a very definite plus for this piece.

[Rodney Russ]

Very interesting piece. I enjoyed the original structure.

[None]

I agree with those who said that this would appear wonderfully on the stage. I like the storytelling aspect of this poem as well. You take the reader on a journey in this average (typical?) couple's portion of life. The use of John and Jane Doe I understood you to mean that this couple could be any couple, therefore, this moment in any couple's life. The deterioration is expressed well. First the mystery and caress of 'true love', then the desire for the mystery and caress that had once been (because, it seems, the couple have become bored with one another, having deciphered that mystery and revealed that they are but two ordinary human beings with all the normal flaws and conditions). You don't stop there, you take us (the reader) farther, into the complaints and accusations of the truth in that 'true love,' then the end of that 'true love' wherein the couple, unable to express or to recapture that mystery, abandon one another, having perhaps discovered that that 'true love' was but an illusion. It's quite a depiction of a facet of reality that can impact 'true love.' Another favorite bit of this, is the end, where you present the question about 'True Love.' This is where you seem to make the unspoken statement that 'love' is NOT like the scene you presented. All in all, your writing seems to present a lesson to the reader. This is where I think your poem, and yourself as the writer, draw the greatest strength.