~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Robyn Armstrong]

I love the beginning to end sequence, how you start with the infatuation of love, and end up with the breaking up sequence. I am not sure that I personally like the breaks in stanza(I am a more traditional poet, having rhyming lines or every other line for example), from red to gray when Jane and John Doe are speaking. I do like the effect that it gives and like "Tania Leigh" said you can definitely see it in your minds eye being acted out. "Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmlessCraving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations " these are my favorite lines, because they are so true. You begin a relationship craving new attention new mystery, with innocent intentions... and it becomes something more it evovles into something either beautiful or sorrowful.

[~Angelic~]

wow I really like this poem and I really can relate to exactly what you wrote.

[pal]

wonderful poem.. right now im asking same questions in my life..
i am on cross roads.. thank u remindming me this
i want u to see this video.. and comment pl.. send me message.. i havent put poem here yet.

pal
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XE0z6EJ49Qo

[JeanPierre]

hi legacy ... imo you are trying to "say" too much in your poem ... to me anyway there seems to be too much in it ... not sure if the poem relates to you personall and perhaps you are really really in love for the very first time ... if so then the "purple prose" can be somewhat forgiven ... if not then i think you should re-visit it and do what we are taught from the beginning ... delete everything that you believe is really good ...

having said all the above there IS much about the poem that is good ... but not sure though that the "jane doe/john doe" inserts are a good thing as they draw attention away from the main body of the work ... the imagery throughout is very good ...

Jp.

[Cyper]

wow very good indeed...i can relate to this completely...

[Rachel Hays]

Beautiful. This is very real, very true. It's a question and a situation we all go through and ask ourselves.

[Donika]

Very well done!! I really like it and I usually don't like stuff written in this style. I think it is rather realistic of love. At first, infatuation blinds us and we think the other person is perfect. You did a good job of showing the progression of "love". If people can get past that hurdle of realizing that their love is not perfect, then they are truly in love. All in all, this is great!!

[John A. McColley]

Well done, I must agree on how well the unique format comes off here. I was at first put off a bit by the whole Jane Doe/ John Doe thing becaus ei believe that anytime we write, we're really writing about characters who could be anyone, and the reader identifying with teh characters is of high importance, therefore makign them somewhat mutable, but I can see where what you've done presses that point home all the more. There are some great observations, my personal perceptions of love aside. Bravo.

[nicki_504]

This is certainly a remarkable piece of work. The thorough questioning of true love is sincere and penetrating. Somehow I believe what you have described between John and Jane is what so many of us often believe to be love but for all practical purposes resembles lust more than anything else. The line "You used to dive in, exploring my shores" (impeccable) indicates that the passion has died which often occurs with lustful unions, once a couple can transcend that, then the probability that it is true love is more likely. More than anything else I believe you have outlined a scenario that many if not all will encounter. You have defined so clearly how easy it is to mistake the pangs of desire and yearning for something greater in the beginning of any new love affair, that it is almost impossible to read this poignant work and not achieve a sense of catharsis.

[Rose Downing]

I like the format a lot. Dialog spliced in as a part of the poem. Truly creative. I also like the idea of making it reflect the stages of love. Newly in love, getting board of love, the break up, and well expressed.