~ True Love ~

 

 

 Tr.u.e. L.o.v.e.

 ‘Bridges’ yet crossed - or even burned

 

That afternoon in autumn,

 

 the Sun began releasing ‘Her Tears of Hope’,

 

 Standing there embracing,

 

looking up, as a light mist caressed our faces…

 

True Love, Indeed… the strongest, matched by no other

Lost in attraction, steady ones breath, are you listening?

Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -

Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

 

Jane Doe: “When we talk, you're always attentive to everything”

John Doe: “I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King”

 

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless

Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations

Desire to please; you do not want to possess…

Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

 

Jane Doe: “You used to dive in, exploring my shores”

John Doe: “You appreciated, respected my Love. Now…you Expect so-much-more.”

 

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove…

Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?

Can Love last forever…? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice…? Exactly…  

Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

 

Jane Doe: “Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries �" you never cared”

John Doe: “You thrive on mind games of torment and despair”

 

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray

Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'

Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever…

To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

 

Jane Doe: “I guess you never really loved me at all!”

John Doe: “Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!”

 

 

 

On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)

We believe this is {True Love}…

 

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~… We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

 

Can Love really be defined?  Does True Love ever fail us?

 Are 'We' willing to work through differences together? (Not by looking in front of 'Us')

 We seem to exclude ourselves �" that’s right… This is a one-way-street, right…?

Love...in all facets -

A development of ‘who we are'...Want to ‘be’...What we can ‘do/be’ for others…

SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE... 

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

  

 ~Legacy

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

A unique format made this fun to read.....the stanzas in red, to me, are like a narrator speaking his piece, and then his voice fades away in time for the vignettes of dialogue.

I can easily see this acted out on a stage with spot lighting alternating between Jane & John Doe and the narrator, who is off to the side.

A wonderfully insightful write about the cycles of love and human relationships.

[Steven Pottle]

Very thought provoking and honest. Made me question the word 'love' and if I'm actually 'in love'.
Love is so difficult to explain as I feel that it comes down to the individual...I love my partner as they make me feel of worth and strong- not worth or strength because I have a partner, but that they make me look at myself and my abilities/creativity etc. They challenge me, they excite me, annoy me, know me, laugh with me, keep good company and let me have my own space and free time- which I also give to them...though we are a couple, we are also individuals with our own interests and friends etc.
But I love that this piece made me question and confirm all this. I suppose that is what I meant by thought provoking.

Great write Legacy.

[Cynthia Yildirim]

Yes, very nice, does love ever fail us? I like that. Your question does it come close to reality, and the fact is that your poetry is your own special reality and we are just pigeons looking in. I love that you play with love and longing in this poem it makes it different and your setup is different also. :)

[CherryEclipse]

NO, True Love Never dies!...I really like the format of this poem....It Speaks Volumes))))))))....I wouldnt change a thing....You have a beautiful mind...Continue to share your impressive skillz.....ciao~

[WriterInside07]

I like your form and style here. I disagree about you changing it as De Bee suggested. that suggested style causes your piece to lose it's power-and it's very powerful. As to my personal thoughts and opinion-you truly captured the rise and fall of most 'love' relationships-you can kill need based love, it's the true love that never dies..even if you are not together, inside you still love that person. My only suggestion is that in your second stanza second line(in red) states "no expectations". as you state further on expectations is the ruination of infatuation. I would suggest changing "no" to "high" as this sets us up for the 'reality' more readily. This is an excellent write and yes other than "no expectations" you have caught the reality of 'love' very well-this reality of unmet expectations, unspoken needs, fills lots of seats on Dr. Phil ;-} thanks for inviting me to review this piece..it is interesting and unique which offers us a new way to read an all too familiar reality-"Where do broken dreams go ?"...WriterInside

[Terri Robinson]

I thought your poem seemed real. I could visualize creatively as I read your poem. Anyone who reads this poem can relate to it.

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

I love the concepts and questions here. True love is of God to mankind and will never let you down. Then we twist it with humanities imperfections, as well as our own misconceptions changing the outcome and often the answer. Great write and Good insight.
Debby

[De Bee Raatikainen Kuza..]

Legacy;

The over all prose is great. But may I suggest not using so many colors and fonts to express your thoughts/words.
You can actually write this like a screenplay when it comes to the dialogue, since it is written in 2nd or 3rd party. You can even rid the parentheses.

I truly hope you do not mind, but I took the liberity to do it for you to show you what I mean.
See below.

True Love.

'Bridges' yet crossed - or even burned
That afternoon in autumn, the Sun began releasing -
'Her Tears of Hope'; standing there embracing, looking up;
a light mist caressed our faces�

True Love, Indeed� the strongest, matched by no other.
Lost in attraction, steady ones breathe, are you listening?
Interpersonal love, shaped of elements of fallacy -
Spawns the birth, now borne of Love or Infatuation?

Jane Doe:
When we talk, you're always attentive to everything.

John Doe:
I Love how you cook, clean and treat me like a King.

Love begins of innocence, nothing short of harmless
Craving sense of mystery, passing boundaries, no expectations-
Desire to please; you do not want to possess�
Engulfed in Flames of shadowed passions, your heart at rest!

Jane Doe:
You used to dive in, exploring my shores.

John Doe:
You appreciated, respected my Love. Now�you Expect so-much-more.

Choices made, perceptions viewed, push to shove�
Could you spend your life, 24 hours a day with the one you Love?
Can Love last forever�? What do we 'choose' to sacrifice�?
Exactly�
Explore the nature, understanding the function of Love.

Jane Doe:
Ashamed I am, concealing pain with silent cries � you never cared.

John Doe:
You thrive on mind games of torment and despair.

Pain vibrates, shattered dreams, crossing lines of gray
Tomorrow, soon will deliver an 'envelope of dismay'
Rhythm of dance, life once treasured, now lost forever�
To each left scars, unseen, chiseled within their soul...

Jane Doe:
I guess you never really loved me at all!

John Doe:
Go ahead and take another picture off the wall!



On first glance, Love (First Love, for the second time, third or so-on)
We believe this is {True Love}�

Is this possible?

Do we have an idea of their favorite color, number, T.V. show and/or what makes them (tick)?

No~� We seem to judge the visible aspects such as appearance, smell, things outwardly that pulls us in.

Can Love really be defined? Does True Love ever fail us?
Are 'We' willing to work through differences together?
(Not by looking in front of 'Us')

We seem to exclude ourselves � that's right� This is a one-way-street, right�?

Love...in all facets �

A development of 'who we are'...Want to 'be'...What we can 'do/be' for others�


SILENT PROMISE 'ONCE MADE', LEFT DROWNING IN A SOUR GLASS OF WINE...

Does True Love 'Ever Die'...?

[larryb]

I like this a lot and no true love never dies

[Wee Owl]

Very powerful poem. I like the format. A suggestion for the end would to be Jane Doe: line here, John doe: line here, Giving the lovers the last word perhaps going to the future or another relationship. This was hard for me to read in a way because I'm watching my parents marriage dissolve. :P IF only they could go back to the joy. If only...If only. Four wonderful things have come out of their marriage: me, my sister, my niece and nephew. Enjoy the gifts given and learn from the lessons presented. Great job on the poem, Legacy. Weeowl

[alternative_be]

Very true to life. I too like the concept of having the conversation between the anonymous couples between the lines of poetry. The poem as a whole is interactive, which makes it easy to recognize and makes the content plausible for how love can be in real life.
I also like the way you change fonts, which highlights your thoughts and what you want to express. Any reader should be able the two extremes of love: love that is true and everlasting and love that is not lesser when it comes to being true, but is dying because the protagonists's lifes or personalities change along the path of life.