Ode to a Bug

Ode to a Bug

 

Poor bug

Drowned.

At the bottom

It was found.

A short life

Shorter made

In this glass

Of lemonade.

I wondered of its dying thoughts

Or if it truly thinks.

Wish I'd found it sooner,

Before I'd finished my drink.

 

 

Legion

12APR08

Reviews

[Clockwork]

I like the overall irony with the bug's final destination being the drinkers mouth. It is an enjoyable piece with a nice dose of wit. My favorite lines were "Wish I'd found it sooner, /Before I'd finished my drink."

I would say that I felt line 10 was a bit rough overall. You set up that great thought about what was going through the bugs mind in line nine, but the flow is a bit off.

[Nolo Segundo]

I like this-- a fun poem to read, and it made me laugh! Congrats on your win in the ode contest.

[mae23]

Really liked this especially the ending and the simple thoughts and lines.

[SM Davis]

This is ... fantastic. I've just read it again. Your mastery is second to none.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

LOL This is so funny and cute! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[M.Babu]

This is officially the funniest most ludicrous poem on God's Earth. I've laughed my butt off for five minutes! No wonder it placed in the competition. Congratulations.

[Angelheaded Hipster]

You know...now I have to add Zappin...my ode to mosquitoes.

I cant read anymore today, you have me in tears from laughing this morning.

Thank you for being insane.

[Edie Boyd]

I love how you created something so funny and creative out of a little moment most of us wouldn't think twice about. Well, I guess you would think about the icky factor of it...

[Lab Rat 1984]

Hahaha! So many times I have done that! Another nicely written poem!

[Kiya]

Ewwww!!! Such a funny, silly poem that flowed so nicely. I hate it when I find bugs in my food. Well done :)